Battle of the Bands song...

alright, so im not very musically talented, but i figured i wanted to be in battle of the bands a few days before we had to submit our lyrics n stuff...its a rap about the sun, moon, and the stars, tell me what you think before we make complete fools of ourselves up on stage...thanks...oh its called

"Risin’ Horizon" by the Distance Dynamos ft. the Sub-5 Milers<<<we're a bunch of track n field kids so thats the best name we could come up with....the chorus is at the bottom so just put it in where it says [chorus]

I woke up to the sunrise and to my surprise

The sun was staring at me, solitary eyes

Keep a sundial to keep up readily

Hold the rays of light shining down on me steadily

Every day (trying) to escape the dark and the deadly

When the medley of the clocks begin their morning melody

As the sundial shadows (the) time from the sky

What would you do with that time to pass by

Reminiscing thoughts whilst the clouds in the sky

Keep us from the secrets that the stars know why

And blame us not knowing where the world that we are

Guided like compass, due north from a star

Shining down to earth with its last bit of light

Trying to tell a story of a dream of tonight…

[chorus]

The reflection in our direction in the water of the beach

Relax, Close your eyes, the sun is in your reach

Sitting on a dune, waiting ‘til noon, soon

The sun will go down evicted by the moon

Staggered by the stars,

Hidden by the comments of the comets

And the space beyond mars,

Getting nowhere in your shuttles or astronaut cars

But it’s catching the sun, in the arch of its crescent

Submits to the night, an acquired acquiescent

But agrees to return when the moon is all gone

‘Gins risin’ from the horizon at the break of dawn

[chorus]

The lunar cycle month of the wax and the wane

Eclipse his own mistake to give him time to explain

Cradling the wishes that fall from shooting stars

As far as deep goes without leaving true scars

Through the dipper duo of the big and the little

Off Orion’s belt to the star in the middle

Just a constellation hanging out in zero gravity

Just a star formation banging out formality

Suddenly it’s caught in a matter of spatial

Gravitational pull to absorb it into orbit

And warp it back and forth, in between a black hole

Trapped the speed of light by powerless control

But to plan it for the planets to perfectly align

Don’t ask me, I’m out of this world all the time

<<this is the chorus>>

(It’s keeping me awake)

Trying to sleep through death’s disguise

Where hope lives on to cope with the lies

(Reflections in the lake)

Saying so long to the moon, but ill talk to you soon

Cause you’ll be there when I’ve closed my eyes

(It watches over me)

Trying to make it through the day’s disguise

To last a little longer, ‘fore I say my goodbyes

(The light will set me free)

Saying so long to sun when the night has begun

And say hello when I open my eyes

<<end chorus>>

[Rapped chorus:]

Trying to sleep through death and nights disguise

Where hope lives on to cope with your lies

Saying so long to the moon, but I’ll talk to you soon

Cause you’ll be there when I’ve closed my eyes

Trying to make it through the day, and life’s disguise

To last a little longer ‘fore I say my goodbyes

Saying so long to the sun when the night has begun

And say ‘hello’ when I open my eyes

how is that in terms of being performed in stage????

our own song

ok, we wrote it ourselves, that why i put it here...any thoughts?

damn boy, thats good!!

i think thats one of the best lyrics i ever heard! ( wrote by "no-names" )