Greyfoxx Posted October 5, 2006 Share Posted October 5, 2006 Okay, since i am tired of making a new thread everytime i wanna put in a new piece, i have figured out i should just make one big neverending thread!!! Now, for my first peice i wish to show you all is something i made about a year and a half ago, when i first started going out with andy. My Poem When I am sad and look into your eyes I see your great sense of pride. Eventhough you might be far away I feel your presense anyway. You, the one who makes my knees weak Even when you speak. With you I feel alive and well. Our love is strong enough that we'll tell, "I love you forever and always" I believe it will never fray. Within your arms, I'm true to my heart When we talk, It's almost an art. In my Heart I know it's true, That I'll be by your side through and through. Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/597b7053e7f6b9db3d3e47081db54c76.jpg youre so freaking gothic fox' date=' just wait till you meet the emo me. youre like redheaded vampira or something[/quote'] http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/aac84d56c4349b6631041cd70d25f813.gif Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jeezy Posted October 6, 2006 Share Posted October 6, 2006 Wow...that poem really touches me..it's so nice...if someone would say this to me...I would be speechless Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vash_the_Stampede Posted October 6, 2006 Share Posted October 6, 2006 Pretty.. Can't really review it because I personally can't review written word, but it's nice. Quote Good bye, auf wiedersehen, adiós, sayonara Gone Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Peterdea Posted October 6, 2006 Share Posted October 6, 2006 i love it! :thumbsup: Quote Its good to be back. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Greyfoxx Posted October 6, 2006 Author Share Posted October 6, 2006 i thank ye much for yer comments all....its nice to know people like my work @Jeezy: I'm glad it affected you so, its good to know that my work can touch people on different levels...and just to let ya know, when i gave that to Andy, he WAS speechless Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/597b7053e7f6b9db3d3e47081db54c76.jpg youre so freaking gothic fox' date=' just wait till you meet the emo me. youre like redheaded vampira or something[/quote'] http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/aac84d56c4349b6631041cd70d25f813.gif Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
diana Posted October 6, 2006 Share Posted October 6, 2006 Oh hell yeah! This is an amazing piece of art...really touching...*wipes away the tear* Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/8b479714c2981449a34f1f582adc8fb2.jpg ...ljubim...<3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
chaz-girl-fanatic1730760665 Posted October 6, 2006 Share Posted October 6, 2006 OMG it's spo very great i...i...I'm touching it's so...*no don't cry jainy hold back*^^ no i think it's pretty^^ :thumbsup: you will be famous if you make this poems official Quote _________________________http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/8b60b4626fa671452df7725c5bf850cf.jpg________________________________ *points up* "ya know when you get THIS cool you don't care about details...!" xXMy GalleryXx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Greyfoxx Posted October 6, 2006 Author Share Posted October 6, 2006 Wow, thats nice of you to say jainy*i think thats yer name* it means a lot that people like my writing!!! Oh hell yeah! This is an amazing piece of art...really touching...*wipes away the tear* Thank ye much Diana, i'm glad it had that affect Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/597b7053e7f6b9db3d3e47081db54c76.jpg youre so freaking gothic fox' date=' just wait till you meet the emo me. youre like redheaded vampira or something[/quote'] http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/aac84d56c4349b6631041cd70d25f813.gif Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
chaz-girl-fanatic1730760665 Posted October 6, 2006 Share Posted October 6, 2006 well greyfoxx my real name is jana but my nickname (my friends call me that and others too^^) is jainy...you can call me both...^^ Quote _________________________http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/8b60b4626fa671452df7725c5bf850cf.jpg________________________________ *points up* "ya know when you get THIS cool you don't care about details...!" xXMy GalleryXx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Greyfoxx Posted October 6, 2006 Author Share Posted October 6, 2006 well greyfoxx my real name is jana but my nickname (my friends call me that and others too^^) is jainy...you can call me both...^^ thank ye much jana/jainy and thanks for likin my poem Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/597b7053e7f6b9db3d3e47081db54c76.jpg youre so freaking gothic fox' date=' just wait till you meet the emo me. youre like redheaded vampira or something[/quote'] http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/aac84d56c4349b6631041cd70d25f813.gif Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
chaz-girl-fanatic1730760665 Posted October 6, 2006 Share Posted October 6, 2006 ^^no problem ^^ Quote _________________________http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/8b60b4626fa671452df7725c5bf850cf.jpg________________________________ *points up* "ya know when you get THIS cool you don't care about details...!" xXMy GalleryXx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jackie Posted October 6, 2006 Share Posted October 6, 2006 that was so alwsome Quote Jacks 1st sig. http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/5c1dc57df369238451876ae146e45afb.png Thats whats up ^-^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Greyfoxx Posted October 6, 2006 Author Share Posted October 6, 2006 I Thank Ye Much jackie! i'm glad ya'll liked it Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/597b7053e7f6b9db3d3e47081db54c76.jpg youre so freaking gothic fox' date=' just wait till you meet the emo me. youre like redheaded vampira or something[/quote'] http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/aac84d56c4349b6631041cd70d25f813.gif Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ravynlee Posted October 7, 2006 Share Posted October 7, 2006 Aww... that's so sweet... sentimentally, emotionally, lyrically... I know, that review probably makes you wanna gag or sth but TRUE to me never the less. The first two sentences was what stuck out for me. Better than every other love-themed/inspired/related drivel billions of others aspiring poets pen. Meh. Call it bias but I liked it. Technical stuff; nice flow, uncomplicated use of word (best way to reach target audience/wholistically anyone), clean and consise, to the point, didn't waver, and had heart. Can't fake sentiment like that. Nice stuff there Foxxy. Only issue with it - too little of it. Meh. Like a good book, just start getting into it and it ends... hate that. Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/8a6798b252d89e12b3d476bb0fa63027.jpg ~ If I'm not here, I'm there ^ ~ ~ All new general discussion forum ~ Click pic !!! ~ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Greyfoxx Posted October 9, 2006 Author Share Posted October 9, 2006 thank you mummy. yer so nice to yer daughter. i try my bestest and i thank ye for liking it. means a lot to an aspiring writer like myself. and of course ya gotta rant! but we wuv yer rants Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/597b7053e7f6b9db3d3e47081db54c76.jpg youre so freaking gothic fox' date=' just wait till you meet the emo me. youre like redheaded vampira or something[/quote'] http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/aac84d56c4349b6631041cd70d25f813.gif Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Greyfoxx Posted October 11, 2006 Author Share Posted October 11, 2006 Newest Poem Night goes by slowly As I think of thee I feel so lonely As I see your face I cry for thee My dreams have yet to come My mind has been on the run My thoughts are of you My mind wants nothing but you And this I know is true The wind howls outside of my window The rain cries on the glass As I match is’ glance I feel the tears onto me As I feel the loneliness fill the inside You are what carries me on But also you keep me up at night I won’t give your love up without a fight And I know beyond this tunnel Is you standing in the light… *sorry for the double post* Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/597b7053e7f6b9db3d3e47081db54c76.jpg youre so freaking gothic fox' date=' just wait till you meet the emo me. youre like redheaded vampira or something[/quote'] http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/aac84d56c4349b6631041cd70d25f813.gif Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
chaz-girl-fanatic1730760665 Posted October 11, 2006 Share Posted October 11, 2006 OMG YOU'RE SUCH A AWESOME WRITTER!!!!!!!!!great job Quote _________________________http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/8b60b4626fa671452df7725c5bf850cf.jpg________________________________ *points up* "ya know when you get THIS cool you don't care about details...!" xXMy GalleryXx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jeezy Posted October 11, 2006 Share Posted October 11, 2006 That's so touching...I love the way you write...just awesome Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Greyfoxx Posted October 11, 2006 Author Share Posted October 11, 2006 *blushes* thanks guys....it means soo much to me that ya'll like my stuff Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/597b7053e7f6b9db3d3e47081db54c76.jpg youre so freaking gothic fox' date=' just wait till you meet the emo me. youre like redheaded vampira or something[/quote'] http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/aac84d56c4349b6631041cd70d25f813.gif Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ravynlee Posted October 12, 2006 Share Posted October 12, 2006 Hey Foxxy, great stuff as always. The rhyming gave it a nice over all sense of consistency and it flowed well. A bit repetative, but still good. The final stanza stood out for me. Noice my sweet. Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/8a6798b252d89e12b3d476bb0fa63027.jpg ~ If I'm not here, I'm there ^ ~ ~ All new general discussion forum ~ Click pic !!! ~ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Greyfoxx Posted October 13, 2006 Author Share Posted October 13, 2006 thanks for your short rant mum....i'm honestly surprised that its that short....but.... short sweet and to the point... More poems when i get around to writing/typing them Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/597b7053e7f6b9db3d3e47081db54c76.jpg youre so freaking gothic fox' date=' just wait till you meet the emo me. youre like redheaded vampira or something[/quote'] http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/aac84d56c4349b6631041cd70d25f813.gif Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Peterdea Posted October 13, 2006 Share Posted October 13, 2006 looking forward to them for sure! Quote Its good to be back. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MrsBennington-Delson Posted October 13, 2006 Share Posted October 13, 2006 great poems greyfoxx! I just... uhm... dunno... I.... they're awesome!!! *can't wait to read more* Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/f03af096463589b6a2bebdd0c1455573.jpg Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Greyfoxx Posted October 13, 2006 Author Share Posted October 13, 2006 This is new.... Okay, here is a new one i just randomly typed about 3 seconds ago I have become something So dark and daring I’ve become some creature I strike fear into those innocents When you see me You try so hard not to scream You see the darkness in me You also see my suffering My life before was so tough You feel pity You feel pain You feel the darkness around My new world has come to town True to myself I now stand tall Unafraid of what I might do With the souls of all of you…. Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/597b7053e7f6b9db3d3e47081db54c76.jpg youre so freaking gothic fox' date=' just wait till you meet the emo me. youre like redheaded vampira or something[/quote'] http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/aac84d56c4349b6631041cd70d25f813.gif Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Peterdea Posted October 13, 2006 Share Posted October 13, 2006 That is awesome!!!!! hell yeah! lol something like that would take me a few days good work!!! Quote Its good to be back. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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