I can't write.

[MiindLess]

I can't write.

If I can write it's not alrite.

But if I write, my words aren't right.

Last night, I just saw a sight,

It gave me the biggest fright.

Tonite, I didnt know what to write.

So instead I wrote about what I saw last night.

The television brandished a sharp shiney knife

This girl wanted to end another girl's life.

It's in Japan but I know it's not right.

It's life.

People come and go alrite.

But this girls life...

Deserved more than to end it with a knife.

She has been deprive from education rights.

All from a knife.

I can't write, what's not right.

But it's just a view from last night.

I can't write...if that's not right.

But I know it alright.

 

[LPHybridSnax]

pretty good, but in the future try to match up silibols (yes.. giving advice on something I can't even spell)

 

[GraDoN]

its a ok poem not to bad. few mistakes but nothing that you cant improve on. its cool L) 7/10

 

[Jeezy]

not bad at all