Just a Warning<<<<Poem!

[Greyfoxx]

This is my newest poem....enjoy!

Just a Warning

My Evil Knows no bounds

I allow It to roam freely.

It watches people suffer

Listens to Thier agony.

My Evil is apart of me

So i can snap at any point in time

Be warned, I can to many things

Most, You do not want to hear

Do not cross me

For when you do

My Evil comes out to "play"

Just a warning.

 

[misselement]

thats awesome. im loving it. =)

 

[Pheonix791989]

awesome one greyfoxx. really good.

 

[uwantme2b]

Really good Greyfoxx. Like I said for your last poem, I can hear the anger and deep emotions coming off the page (or screen. ^^) Nice work.

 

[Greyfoxx]

thanks! it takes alot to let u guys see my poems, Im really glad you like em!

 

[meteora500]

i really liked that! good job :thumbsup:

 

[Greyfoxx]

thanks for the feedback!

 

[gaia89]

overall,i like this poem. the idea is good. :thumbsup:

however,i feel that a little more work is to be done on the rhyming.

For example,

My Evil Knows no bounds

I allow It to roam freely.

perhaps it will sound better with:

My Evil Knows no boundaries,

I allow it to roam freely.

Note the end rhymes,it makes the sentences flow smoother.

 

[uwantme2b]

My Evil Knows no boundaries,

I allow it to roam freely.

That doesn't rhyme though. :/

Also, poetry doesn't have to rhyme.

 

[gaia89]

That doesn't rhyme though. :/Also, poetry doesn't have to rhyme.

boundarIES

freeLY

= indirect rhymes.. read it out loud and u'll know

 

[Mad4lp]

EEEEEEEEVALLLLLL! lol. Nice lyrics, short, but nice, though needs work (critiqe me lol) but anyway very feeling-like.

 

[Greyfoxx]

Listen all who say it needs to rythme...My poems dont usally rythme, and the dont have to! Loads of poets dont rythme so, i dont care to. Oh, and its not lyrics. Its a POEM!!!!!!not a song!