My Girlfriend's Material (really good) what do you think?

Hey, whats up people. This is one of my girlfriend's poems/poetry. I thought it was really really good. I think it would make a pretty damn good Linkin Park song if they could write some music for it. What do you all think?

Why do I feel like I dont belong

Why do I fee like something's wrong

Something pulling on my chain

It's rattling my brain

And i cant get out of here

Cant fight the tears

Cant fight the fear

my heart is weary

Is there still hope?

Living day by day

with nothing quite the same

Im so alone.

People surrounding me but no one knows

The pain is eating away at my soul

I miss the old days, I miss the old me

What ever happened to my "happy family"

When i was younger completely oblivious

Not knowing how my life would change.

When it all comes down to it, I miss my mom.

Does she know where i belong?

What would have happened if we'd stayed together.

Our relationship was said to last forever.

Now I am here and she is there.

I try to act as though I dont care.

I act so tough, but I am falling apart

all over again.

What happens when this doesn't last forever?

Am i making up for what i lost in my surrounding?

My heart is broken and my head is pounding.

What happens when this love disappears?

Is it easier to back away

so many changes, no clue what to say.

How can i tell someone im just a waste of time?

Feeling sorry for myself,

so many others with much worse problems.

Maybe this problem will settle itself

or am I still in denial....of reality.

i'm letting myself go.

Friends and family- nobody really knows.

i don't even know.

i am surrounded by laughter

but what happens when the laughter stops?

i'm still stuck inside of myself

with nothing to gain.

not facing reality somethings gotta change.

i miss the feeling of being home.

but i know i don't belong there "home".

i'm so tired of crying

so tired of denying

how i feel.

how i feel.

how do i feel....

alone.

So what do you guys think? She has a lot more stuff, this is only one of her works. I like it and i think she could be a damn good songwriter. How about you guys? Let me know what you think.

Your girlfriend is really talented! *claps*

*Claps along*

Hey guys! This is collision_course_777's girlfriend. I decided to register myself..fun place to be and all. Thanks for your responses to my stuff. I will have more posted on here don't you worry LOL! Well' date=' I will be on here later. Be good kids![/quote']

 

your poetry/song is awsome! i can't wait to read what ealse u post!

*claps with fadedblue and chester_crazy*

very good. compared to urs mine suck! lol

Dont put yourself down like that. Im sure your material is just as special to you. Why dont you go ahead and post some of your stuff here and see what people think. It just might surprise you. Go ahead, try it. :thumbsup:

It's been difficult

it's been trying

but after so long

i'm done crying

it hasn't helped

and it never will

it's time to show you how i feel

i can't fake the anger

and i'd feel a lot safer

if you were out of the picture

screw you and your lies

you've been given enough tries

to repent yourself

i'll do what i must

if i hear of one more punch

or even a wrong tone

i hate you

i can't imagine how she feels

who knew love could kill

you will get what's coming to you

you ready for such a hell

i don't know what i can do

to get her out of this

but stayiihng with you will kill her

and you apparently don't give a shit

does it make you happy for her to hang her head down in shame of all the bruises, the scars-the broken bones?

i wish i could show her love she deserves

i wish she knew she was worth such love

a world full of kisses and hugs

i miss her beautiful face.

her once beautiful eyes.

i miss her will and strength

and even the stupid fights (they never involved bruises)

i miss her grip when she hugged me

i miss the smiles

now she can't even look at me

i haven't seen her truely happy in a while

i hope you rot alive

i hope you burn

she's been through enough torment

and now -bitch, it's your turn

one day she will gather the balls to pay you back for all you've done

I love my mommy with all my heart

every punch you've laid on her

hits me just as hard

i will save her one day

one day she won't have to wear her patches of shame

she has to be willing to get away from you

i nkow it will happen some day

if she doesn't break away

her doom- i shall despair

all for hear of loneliness

all for someone to care.

mom you know i love you

not all in this world is lost

but i cannot help you until you are ready to be your own boss

get rid of this bastard- LEAVE

i will scream when you finally break free

but what the hell do i know

oh yea he loves you-that's right

nobody ever listens to me

be gentle with that one folks, touchy subject for me. let me know what you think of it. i edited it a little bit cause i did't want everyone to think i was psycho. i was pissed when i wrote it if you can't tell. let me know k?

It's been difficult

it's been trying

but after so long

i'm done crying

it hasn't helped

and it never will

it's time to show you how i feel

i can't fake the anger

and i'd feel a lot safer

if you were out of the picture

screw you and your lies

you've been given enough tries

to repent yourself

i'll do what i must

if i hear of one more punch

or even a wrong tone

i hate you

i can't imagine how she feels

who knew love could kill

you will get what's coming to you

you ready for such a hell

i don't know what i can do

to get her out of this

but stayiihng with you will kill her

and you apparently don't give a shit

does it make you happy for her to hang her head down in shame of all the bruises, the scars-the broken bones?

i wish i could show her love she deserves

i wish she knew she was worth such love

a world full of kisses and hugs

i miss her beautiful face.

her once beautiful eyes.

i miss her will and strength

and even the stupid fights (they never involved bruises)

i miss her grip when she hugged me

i miss the smiles

now she can't even look at me

i haven't seen her truely happy in a while

i hope you rot alive

i hope you burn

she's been through enough torment

and now -bitch, it's your turn

one day she will gather the balls to pay you back for all you've done

I love my mommy with all my heart

every punch you've laid on her

hits me just as hard

i will save her one day

one day she won't have to wear her patches of shame

she has to be willing to get away from you

i nkow it will happen some day

if she doesn't break away

her doom- i shall despair

all for hear of loneliness

all for someone to care.

mom you know i love you

not all in this world is lost

but i cannot help you until you are ready to be your own boss

get rid of this bastard- LEAVE

i will scream when you finally break free

but what the hell do i know

oh yea he loves you-that's right

nobody ever listens to me

 

 

 

be gentle with that one folks, touchy subject for me. let me know what you think of it. i edited it a little bit cause i did't want everyone to think i was psycho. i was pissed when i wrote it if you can't tell. let me know k?

Wow, baby. I know you have read that one to me before, but i guess i never really listened to it. That was really, really good, baby. I told you this was a good idea though, didn't i? I knew the people here would like your stuff. I know you got tons more, so go ahead and keep posting it. All of it sounds great. I love you babe.