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[Marizka]

Raptured happiness

Made you confess

You live for this

And only this

It’s all you want

All you need

Without it you are

What you can’t be

Almost forgotten

But still alive

Great is the longing

But always in time

It holds confusion

Still you let it in

It’s grip is strong

no use in fighting

will it ever leave

or once go away

so you can be

what they say

monsters screaming

calling your name

it is finally leaving

unveils your true face

nowhere to hide

in this state you remain

all this time you disguised;

you are insane.

 

[brokenangel]

i like this!! the way you rhyme is real original and i love the very last part

nowhere to hide

in this state you remain

all this time you disguised;

you are insane.

jah...good job (you're dutch, right?) goed gedaan (hehe...would be so funny if you weren't)

 

[Marizka]

haha yeah, I am, would quite weird, ur right, but thanx for ur comment

 

[uwantme2b]

This is a really nice poem. I love the imagery you used.

Good work Marizka :thumbsup:

 

[immortal89]

Hey Marizka (do you have nic name that i oculd refer you by?)

Nice poem, good one but elongate your lines a little

 

[Marizka]

thanx! by elongate you mean making the lines longer? yeah I make poems with long and short lines, but it might sound better, ow and my real name is Mariska but you can call me mariz or Maris, that's what I'm usually called.

 

[keza]

wow mari, as usual amazingly written! *claps and waits for the encore*

awesomely awesome!

 

[Marizka]

thanx girl!

 

[keza]

many any times...hehe

i repped you even though you didnt give me an encore...^^

 

[Marizka]

ow haha *gives encore* lol I didn't realize what it meaned! ow and *gives u rep big time*

 

[Friðbjörn]

That's a great poem

 

[_deemy_]

wow that was relly good :thumbsup: i really liked the ending. good work. *claps*