Marizka Posted September 6, 2005 Share Posted September 6, 2005 Raptured happiness Made you confess You live for this And only this It’s all you want All you need Without it you are What you can’t be Almost forgotten But still alive Great is the longing But always in time It holds confusion Still you let it in It’s grip is strong no use in fighting will it ever leave or once go away so you can be what they say monsters screaming calling your name it is finally leaving unveils your true face nowhere to hide in this state you remain all this time you disguised; you are insane. 1 Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/1f3f1672c41a196591ae77f9d8e11a0a.jpg This one world vision Turns us in to compromise What good's religion When it's each other we despise Damn the government Damn their killing Damn their lies Placebo-Sleeping With Ghosts Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
brokenangel Posted September 7, 2005 Share Posted September 7, 2005 i like this!! the way you rhyme is real original and i love the very last part nowhere to hide in this state you remain all this time you disguised; you are insane. jah...good job (you're dutch, right?) goed gedaan (hehe...would be so funny if you weren't) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Marizka Posted September 7, 2005 Author Share Posted September 7, 2005 haha yeah, I am, would quite weird, ur right, but thanx for ur comment Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/1f3f1672c41a196591ae77f9d8e11a0a.jpg This one world vision Turns us in to compromise What good's religion When it's each other we despise Damn the government Damn their killing Damn their lies Placebo-Sleeping With Ghosts Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
uwantme2b Posted September 7, 2005 Share Posted September 7, 2005 This is a really nice poem. I love the imagery you used. Good work Marizka :thumbsup: Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/9b54002b9ea728de39c3770316d52169.jpg Shark picture by Graham Lambert Rep me please :-) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
immortal89 Posted September 10, 2005 Share Posted September 10, 2005 Hey Marizka (do you have nic name that i oculd refer you by?) Nice poem, good one but elongate your lines a little Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/8718bef602fa810e1299dc63e8069e3a.jpg Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Marizka Posted September 11, 2005 Author Share Posted September 11, 2005 thanx! by elongate you mean making the lines longer? yeah I make poems with long and short lines, but it might sound better, ow and my real name is Mariska but you can call me mariz or Maris, that's what I'm usually called. Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/1f3f1672c41a196591ae77f9d8e11a0a.jpg This one world vision Turns us in to compromise What good's religion When it's each other we despise Damn the government Damn their killing Damn their lies Placebo-Sleeping With Ghosts Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
keza Posted September 11, 2005 Share Posted September 11, 2005 wow mari, as usual amazingly written! *claps and waits for the encore* awesomely awesome! Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/ce845b5e1cfffbb4e7ea78abcb7bf1ae.png http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/3b7255122472a9285083158e67a4c66b.jpg Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Marizka Posted September 11, 2005 Author Share Posted September 11, 2005 thanx girl! Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/1f3f1672c41a196591ae77f9d8e11a0a.jpg This one world vision Turns us in to compromise What good's religion When it's each other we despise Damn the government Damn their killing Damn their lies Placebo-Sleeping With Ghosts Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
keza Posted September 11, 2005 Share Posted September 11, 2005 many any times...hehe i repped you even though you didnt give me an encore...^^ 1 Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/ce845b5e1cfffbb4e7ea78abcb7bf1ae.png http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/3b7255122472a9285083158e67a4c66b.jpg Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Marizka Posted September 11, 2005 Author Share Posted September 11, 2005 ow haha *gives encore* lol I didn't realize what it meaned! ow and *gives u rep big time* Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/1f3f1672c41a196591ae77f9d8e11a0a.jpg This one world vision Turns us in to compromise What good's religion When it's each other we despise Damn the government Damn their killing Damn their lies Placebo-Sleeping With Ghosts Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Friðbjörn Posted September 14, 2005 Share Posted September 14, 2005 That's a great poem Quote [broken External Image]:http://img259.imageshack.us/img259/2784/lpfas08mostintelligentym8.jpg Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
_deemy_ Posted September 15, 2005 Share Posted September 15, 2005 wow that was relly good :thumbsup: i really liked the ending. good work. *claps* Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/2c0c568daf69e26e0190fdd1817fb7db.jpg life may not be the party we hoped for, but while we're here we should dance Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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