PyRo'S

[MrRandomGuy]

Fire dancing gracefully


across the sky .ashs


flying through out the


air,the way fire dances


its just a calming relaxing


warmth from ground and out


but fire is so elegent and


fragile,they way it moves


when the wind hits it oh


just the movement of the


flames is so calming and


beautiful to watch and to


seek true beauty from the fire


its self.they way it dances across


the grass the ground,like lava


so pretty but deadly,,but us Pyro's


love the fire,the smell of fire,the smell


of ashes falling to the ground like Snow,


so grey and still smelling like fire.

 


by lpp

 

[gaia89]

wow,i like this

 

[LPpinkfreak821]

i love it. i love it. i love it. i love it... omfg... that just like totally ******* rocks! i mean it was like wow cuz it was about Fire and it ******* rocked... i really really like that!!!!!!!!!

 

[uwantme2b]

This isn't bad, but to me... it's not really a poem... it's just sentences that have been cut in half to create a poem structure. It doesn't read like a poem.

No offence, I'm just being honest.

 

[Pheonix791989]

have u heard of freeverse? its a poetic structure that has no rhyme or rythem to it

i like the poem its really good

 

[uwantme2b]

Yes, I have. I do know that not all poems have to rhyme.

I don't know, it just doesn't read like a poem. That's my opinion. I notice that with all Lpp's poems, but maybe that's just her style. I don't know.

 

[MrRandomGuy]

well, I liked it