twilightcrimson7 VS Hyper

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Topic: Standing in front of the mirror, you stare into your eyes, what do you see?

 

 

twilightcrimson7:4

Hyper:1

 

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woooo good topic. *shakes hands with Hyper*

mmk, i'm done with mine, i'll post it.. when twi is done with hers XD

wow...that was fast... I've just been gathering ideas ...

call it fast, took me 24 hours, it's just a.. topic that i've actually been thinking about lately :x

[ Be inspired by the melody of rhymes,]

[ Hold on to this moment,]

[ Before the desire dries.]

 

Good luck!

Alright I am done

I hope my weird style isn't confusing...

 

 

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Cold air touches my soul and I awaken

Opened eyes, I stare at something

Something unsure, like an erased drawing.

Something faded, something blurred.

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I inch forward,

Trying to get closer

To that picture

In front of me

Yet so far away

I am holding on to nothing

Floating on through darkness

And obscurity

Wind burning

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The scene in front

Is constantly changing.

Lines sharpening,

Then blurring

Light and dark etched onto it

Then rearranged

As if some invisible person

Were trying to put it together

Like a puzzle

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I reach out with numb fingers,

My ghostly white hand

Touches the smooth cool surface

The image ripples,

As if I had touched

The surface of an ocean.

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Eyes

Gray-Blue

Or are they green?

They look sad.

They look angry

They look dark

I am scared of those eyes.

I want to look away

But I can’t

Their dark pupils

Have frozen me

To my core

Leaving the same wind

That tears at my skin

Inside of my hollow heart

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The face with the eyes stares at me

I shudder

I want to speak

But it starts before me

“You don’t know me, do you?”

it asks…I nod.

It stares at me coldly

I am terrified of it.

My bones ache

from the frost that grows around me

the wind scratches at my insides

they might have bled

if I wasn’t so cold

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Suddenly, the eyes turn sad

“Who am I?”

I shake my head

The voice echoes

And echoes

Inside my head

My head with thoughts

And dreams

And questions

 

‘Who am I,’

I ask again.

cant vote till hyper posts but yours is awesome twi *pats twilight at the back/

^ I agree.. I thought it was awesome.. Really nice work..

As I look into these darkened eyes

The once prosperous mind, filled with pain

Peering through to this blackened heart

Soul peirced and fading

 

The colorless orbs I now stare into

I remember once were filled with color

They were to see great things around the world

Now they will only see the pain and hurt caused by fucked up society

 

Thoughts impure

Emotions a stir

He who stands in front of me

Isn't who everyone thought he was

 

In his eyes it's evident

He's hiding from the world

Lashing out at those who try to get close

In fear of encountering this horrific pain

 

The glorioius soldier has fallen

He's become what he fought

Should he kill himself?

Or live a lie

 

Each way a path to possible righteousness

Each path holding it's own trials

Some easy, some hard

All that's needed, an ounce of spirit

 

The eyes in front of me start to gain color

There is a purpose, that I don't understand

No longer are these eyes dark and cold

Now they've become colorful, warm, and inviting

Wow, those are some great poems. Good luck, both of you.

How do we vote, by the way? Or don't we start voting yet?

yeah, you can start voting...people already started doing that

wow..*stares in amazment* wow u guyz are really talented. dam this is going to be a hard round....its going to take a while for me 2 vote. very sophisticated.

wow Hyper, that was really amazing! ^^ I loved the ending good work

Wow vewry amazing to both of you.I really loved this part part from Hyper's

 

''The glorioius soldier has fallen

He's become what he fought

Should he kill himself?

Or live a lie''

 

And this part from Twi's

 

''Eyes

Gray-Blue

Or are they green?

They look sad.

They look angry

They look dark

I am scared of those eyes.

I want to look away

But I can’t

Their dark pupils

Have frozen me

To my core

Leaving the same wind

That tears at my skin

Inside of my hollow heart''

 

 

Wow.They both had awesome word play and I really want to vote for both damn it!

 

But this part from Twi's is amazing

 

''My bones ache

from the frost that grows around me

the wind scratches at my insides

they might have bled

if I wasn’t so cold''

 

So my vote is Twi.Very good job to both of you though.

Both writings express the emotions within and show good imagery..i can also see that the two of u approached the idea in your own unique way.. good job!

I love them both. They're both very meaningful.

Another tough choice. Gosh, both of your poetry is amazing <3 Seriously... how do youpeople write like that lol. I think I actually understood them both really well (Ha, that's a first, most of the time I'm confused) and the words and meanings... very deep!

 

Honestly, I don't know who to vote for right now... I'll come back and think about it lol.

Again, two amazing poems. We have some very talented writers on this board.

 

But, I'm going to vote for Twi because her style and form is unique and I really like the ending.

 

Good job both of you

Again, two amazing poems. We have some very talented writers on this board.

 

 

agree with that

wow another amazingly difficult choice, I dont have much time so I'll be short. I really loved what Hyper did, it's like your also looking through the writers eyes! I love the way he's done that. With Twi's I just got completely "into" it, you just feel what the writer feels, thats an amazing skill. So my choice is Twi, because the visionary is brilliant.

Ddue, I BETTER NOT VOTE ON HTIS ONE. OK 50/50 WHOEVER WINS GETS MY VOTE

my vote goes to twi due to the better imagery and details

i hate doing this, but i know how much it sucks that no one's voting (probably 'cause there's too much talent to just pick one...it would be soooo much easier if you both sucked..which is CLEARLY not the case ) but uhh...i vote for hyper, 'cause the usage of words is just awesome... the words are very powerful and i think it matched nicely with the topic..so does twi's ... oh crap.. okay.. yeah, i pick hyper . you guys are both awesome though (like everyone else says)