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this is my 1st try at a fan fic.. i dont kno where its any good or not so can u post and tell if its good or crap..

 

It had been a couple days since the accident.. he still couldn't get over what had happen... it was all he kept thinking of.. he kept saying in his mind over and over again.. if only he had been there maybe he have stopped it all from happening and maybe he wouldn't be here.. here in his home by himself and alone, without his sister or his parents.... but that wasn't going to last for long....

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here is the 2nd chapter

 

The next day

 

*the phone starts to rings* chester look at the clock next to his bed.. it was 10am..fucking phone, chester says to himself , i bet it the school.. so he gets up and run down stairs to answer the phone.

 

Hello..? this is Mrs.. white from the school office we just enquiring why chester hasn't been at school for the last week.. *chester puts on a fake mum voice* umm.. sorry he.. he has been really sick for the last week and he's feeling a lot better now. he will becoming in later today... ok thank you Mrs.. bennington.. *chester hangs up the phone*. Great now i have to go to school..*sigh*.

 

Chester runs upstairs takes a shower and get changed in to a grey hooded sweat shirt and a baggy pair of cargos.. then he grabs his wallet and walks out the front door and locks it...

 

he decided to go get a coffee before he made his way to school, coffee always made him feel better. even tho he could not make this any better, they were gone, dead and he'd have to accept it. as he finished his coffee, he made his way up to school, walked up the front steps, in to the building and to the office..

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lol great chapter I'm suprised Mrs. White actually thought it was Mrs. Bennington. Either she's not to smart or he is really good at sounding like his mom.

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Somehow I need to be alone

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here the next chap.3

 

Chester opened the door.. "Hello chester." "Hi Mrs..white" "ill give you a late pass, so you can go to ur next class." "ok" Mrs.. white handed him a late pass and say good bye. chester walked out the door and to his next class, English. *chaz thought to himself "Great im going to a class where the teacher totally hates me at least i've miss out on half the class and its the last class of the day"*

 

Chester walk down the hall, turn left, then entered the 1st door on the right. he open the door and walked in. "Nice to see you have decided to join us again chester" "i was sick Mrs. smi.." she cut him off, she always did that to him and only him "yeah that's what you said last month when you skipped" "but.." "chester sit down" chester nodded and sat down the back by himself like normal, he didn't have any friends and never did even in primary school. this was his 1st year in high school, which was almost to an end. there was only 2 days left till the end of the school year.

 

the bell rang Mrs. smith said good bye to her class and ever1 got up and left the room. chester was so glad the school day was over even tho he was only there for 2 hours. chester walk out of the building, down the street to his home. if you can call it that, there was no 1 there to say hi and greet him and ask him how his day was when he got home. cheater sigh and kept walking. chester got home open the front door and walk in, flopped on the couch and stair at the ceiling. he thought to himself "people will soon find out that you are alone and his parent and sister were dead." he still didn't know why he hadn't told anybody they were dead. he just didn't want to, because he didn't want to leave his home.

 

why didn't he want to leave this stupid town he had no friends here, so why did he want to stay? he finally decided he ring the police and tell them his parent and sister were dead and how they died.

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Chester's parents and sister died :(

aww, stupid Mrs.Smith, i hate her *shakes fist*

 

Same here,lets go beat her up lol

 

I am the enemy who is honest and the friend who has betrayed

but it's not my fault you've left your mind in my hands to invade

Remember to return the needle once I'm done with your vein

And I'll remember to give a push when your mind can't complain

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Great story so far,Post Soon pleaz.

 

I am the enemy who is honest and the friend who has betrayed

but it's not my fault you've left your mind in my hands to invade

Remember to return the needle once I'm done with your vein

And I'll remember to give a push when your mind can't complain

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oh okay, post really soon then lol I'm excited........

 

I am the enemy who is honest and the friend who has betrayed

but it's not my fault you've left your mind in my hands to invade

Remember to return the needle once I'm done with your vein

And I'll remember to give a push when your mind can't complain

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heres my next chap.

 

chester fell a sleep on the couch. but before he fell a sleep, he decided that he tell the school about his parents and his sister tomorrow.

 

~The next day~

 

chester woke up at 6am. he decided to have a really long shower so he could clear his mind for what he was going to do today. after his shower he got dressed. when down stairs, went out the door and locked it(7am). he decided to get a donut and coffee. then go to school. when he finished his coffee and donut it was 7:30am. so he decided to go to school.

 

he walked to school, walk up the steps and to the office. he knocked on the door and no1 answer his knock, so he knew there was no1 there yet, so he slide to the floor, sat and waited. he didn't have to wait for too long after only about 5 mins, some1 started to walk up the hall towards him. chester looked up when he hear the noise of a women's high heels clicking against the ground as she walked. then she got to the door that was next to him, saw chester there and started talking to him.

 

"hello there chester" it was Mrs. white "hi Mrs. white" "chester is there a reason why your sitting on the floor next to the office door?" "yes there is Mrs. white" "ok then chester i'll un-lock the door to the office, then we can go inside and you can tell me what's on your mind, ok" "ok Mrs. white, thank you" she un-locked the door "its ok, come inside chester" chester followed her into the school office.

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Oh what happens next? Post more!!! *Jumps up and down excitedly*

 

I am the enemy who is honest and the friend who has betrayed

but it's not my fault you've left your mind in my hands to invade

Remember to return the needle once I'm done with your vein

And I'll remember to give a push when your mind can't complain

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