.hP. Posted January 9, 2005 Posted January 9, 2005 here is a song i wrote a while ago...its called torn. -dedicated to Sam- TORN SILENCE BEARS THE PAIN/ I CANT TAKE THE SHAME IT HURTS SO MUCH/ TO HEAR YOUR NAME/ BUT IF I RUN ILL BE BURNT BY FLAMES/ AND IF I STAY ILL BE DROWNED BY RAIN/ I MUST LEARN TO TAME THE ANGER/ BEFORE THE DARKNESS TURNS TO DANGER/ IM LOST IN THE THOUGHTS/ YOU’RE NOW JUST A STRANGER! I CLOSE MY EYES/ AND ALL I SEE/ ARE THE MEMORIES/ OF OUR DARKEND DAYS. I TURN THE PAGES TO FIND/ A STATE OF MIND/ I’VE NEVER FELT BEFORE. I CLOSE THE DOOR TO BE TORN/ 2 PENCE DOWN TO THE CORE/ SHOULD I MOURN OR SHOULD I…. FALL TO THE FLOOR! THE WORDS [WHISPERED IN MY EARS] THE LOOK [iN YOUR EYES AT MINE] THE LIES [YOU NEVER TOLD ME] TIME WILL TELL, [HOW YOU FELT] IT NEVER LIES! A HAND/ AT MY THROAT/ IT CLASPS THIS MISERY/ FOREVER WILL LAST EVERYTHING THEY SAY TO ME WILL NOT HEAL/ THE SCARS YOU’VE LEFT ON ME TO PEEL/ AWAY FROM ME GET AWAY FROM ME GET AWAY FROM ME NOW! I CLOSE MY EYES/ AND ALL I SEE/ ARE THE MEMORIES/ OF OUR DARKEND DAYS. I TURN THE PAGES TO FIND/ A STATE OF MIND/ I’VE NEVER FELT BEFORE. I CLOSE THE DOOR TO BE TORN/ 2 PENCE DOWN TO THE CORE/ SHOULD I MOURN OR SHOULD I…. FALL TO THE FLOOR! THE WORDS [WHISPERED IN MY EARS] THE LOOK [iN YOUR EYES AT MINE] THE LIES [YOU NEVER TOLD ME] TIME WILL TELL, [HOW YOU FELT] IT NEVER LIES! THE REASONS I FOUND WERE NEVER TRUE/ TORN IN TWO/ I NOW SEE RIGHT THROUGH/ THIS LACK OF SELF CONTROL/ I SEE IS EVERLASTING/ IT’S HAUNTING/ I CANT SEEM/ TO ESCAPE THE SHADOW/ THAT’S OVERCASTING/ CHASING ME IS MY MISERY/ EMPATHY/ I WANT TO BE/ SIMPLY/ ALONE! IVE TRIED/ UNLIKE YOU/ TO DO EVERYTHING I COULD DO/ NOW I SEE/ IT WASN’T MEANT TO BE/ YOU AND ME! I CANT SEEM/ TO FIND MY SELF AGAIN/ I THOUGHT YOU WERE MORE THAN A FRIEND/ PERCEPTION TENDS/ TO HIDE THE TRUTH/ I CANT BELIEVE WE WILL BE/ NO MORE! GET AWAY FROM ME…YOU’RE JUST A STRANGER! FALL TO THE FLOOR… TIME NEVER LIES…YOU AND ME… WILL BE NO MORE! bits in brackets are meant to be whispered... ! at the end means YELLING (as well as boldness)...and ... means a pause/just music. Quote Over and out, .::[hP]::. in this farewell there is no blood, no alibi.
Black_Thought Posted January 9, 2005 Posted January 9, 2005 i read it first! and i still think it's awesome! :thumbsup: Quote Your eyes are not enough to understand my chaos... http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/34de8c5de1655a9fc020e5347ecba681.jpg Click to see a winter poem...
Ocean_soul Posted January 9, 2005 Posted January 9, 2005 Beautifull :thumbsup: Quote Never sigh for better world, it's already composed played and told
shirakawa_otori Posted January 12, 2005 Posted January 12, 2005 ver good *clap clap clap* Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/ae02029e59966e62acb48589e0ad898c.jpg My last.fm | My deviantart
angelwithburntwings Posted January 12, 2005 Posted January 12, 2005 thats really good *joins shirakawa with clapping* Quote I remember your other account being banned OOPS!!!
FanSince1999 Posted January 13, 2005 Posted January 13, 2005 it's great, but dont you think it is too hard to memorize? I wouldnt like to perform that song live Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/7dc4dbe2126c7ad7bee7adc51c90545d.jpg
Casper Posted January 13, 2005 Posted January 13, 2005 No, as long as a music beat and tune is made for the lyrics then eventually u'll remember it. Read the lyrics 20 more times with the same beat and u'll start to pick up on the lines especially the chorus. The same procedure works with all lyrics. Quote
Casper Posted January 13, 2005 Posted January 13, 2005 OH!!!!!!!! WHAT'S THIS? A BIT OF BLATANT PLAGIARISM? look closely at the last 3 versus. ........"THIS LACK OF SELF CONTROL" i fear is never ending... "IT’S HAUNTING" how "I CANT SEEM" to "TO FIND MY SELF AGAIN", my walls are closing in... Does this sound familiar to u? Im sorry if Im being harsh. At first I thought the lyrics were good but now............. Quote
.hP. Posted January 14, 2005 Author Posted January 14, 2005 yer i was listenin to lp .... its hardly plagirism....its never going to be publish....i like to call it....inspiration *pokes tounge out at casper*......i know wat ya mean though....im sorry...we all have to start somewhere Quote Over and out, .::[hP]::. in this farewell there is no blood, no alibi.
Recommended Posts
Join the conversation
You can post now and register later. If you have an account, sign in now to post with your account.