bhman65 Posted May 11, 2005 Posted May 11, 2005 Yo, I'm not really a lyric writing kinda person (even though I started this thread) but I wrote this and I wanna know what you think. Its pretty bad and theres no tune to it but anyways. If you think its horrible say it cause i agree. If anyone else has any lyrics they wrote please post. Here it is. So many things in this world that can piss you off They just keep coming and they don’t stop No matter what happens there’s always a twist Something that makes someone’s face get into your fist Everything’s right and then everything’s wrong It always happens and that’s why I wrote this song The only thing you can count on Is everything that’s right Turns into a big fight One minute a smile The next your on fire This world is all one big scam One that just makes dive head first into a dam Cause it’s a dead end from now on No matter where you go you’ll always be wrong What happened to the way things were Whatever happened, there would always be a cure But then everything just came to tear it apart And now I’m bleeding And they’ll never be a new start Quote Get away fromME Gimme my space back You gotta justGO I’ve kept it in but now I’m letting you KNOW I’ve let you go
Hahninator Posted May 11, 2005 Posted May 11, 2005 Omg wow that's awesome. I'll ask someone to freestyle it lol We could turn it into a 1:00-2:00 song Quote
bhman65 Posted May 11, 2005 Author Posted May 11, 2005 thanx (this reply needs to be 10 words so im just writing this) Quote Get away fromME Gimme my space back You gotta justGO I’ve kept it in but now I’m letting you KNOW I’ve let you go
Friðbjörn Posted May 12, 2005 Posted May 12, 2005 This should go in Writers Corner. Quote [broken External Image]:http://img259.imageshack.us/img259/2784/lpfas08mostintelligentym8.jpg
bhman65 Posted May 12, 2005 Author Posted May 12, 2005 Thanx for your opinions. I decided to write something else since I couldn't get back in the mood of the other one lol. Alone without help in the dark There’s nothing here to see, not even a spark Filled only with anxiety Stabbed in the back by society Thoughts fill up my mind All my worries are combined Resolutions completely hidden, they don’t exist The answers to my questions lie in the mist I thought you were adoring me Turns out you were ignoring me I thought you believed I was complete But all my ideas lead me to deceit You’re killing me You can’t even look at me You’re killing me I’m not a possibility (2x) Everyday you’re causing me more and more pain Happiness is slowly going down the drain Why does this have to cause so much dread A dark cloud is resting constantly over my head You left me in the mud to rot I thought you were the one But now I know you’re not I thought you adored me Turns out you ignored me I thought you believed I was complete But all my ideas lead me to deceit You’re killing me You can’t even look at me You’re killing me I’m not a possibility (2x) If you hate me just go ahead and say it Say it right into my face Don’t hold it in, display it (3x progressively) You’re killing me You can’t even look at me You’re killing me I’m not a possibility (2x) I’m not a possibility (3x progressively) Quote Get away fromME Gimme my space back You gotta justGO I’ve kept it in but now I’m letting you KNOW I’ve let you go
Hahninator Posted May 13, 2005 Posted May 13, 2005 Sweet. Be ready for something awesome with this. Quote
Reflectionist Posted May 13, 2005 Posted May 13, 2005 Ok, dude. those lyrics are too good to leave alone. Mind if Hahninator and I see what we can do with it? and if so, can we change up the lyrics a little for syllables? because I think I've got an idea, but some lines are so different, they can't fit in the same song Quote MY PANTS SMELL LIKE SWISS CHEESE!
Reflectionist Posted May 13, 2005 Posted May 13, 2005 uh..i am th frgt10 1 Quote MY PANTS SMELL LIKE SWISS CHEESE!
bhman65 Posted May 13, 2005 Author Posted May 13, 2005 That would be cool. Ya its definitely true that they go all over the place but wtv ull fix that up. Quote Get away fromME Gimme my space back You gotta justGO I’ve kept it in but now I’m letting you KNOW I’ve let you go
diana Posted May 16, 2005 Posted May 16, 2005 Hey! I think this lyrics are great and that heres a new talent! But I dont think you should do a song from it...I too write sometimes some lyrics but I keep them for myself...I like it more that way...But you know, you can do with your thing whatever you want... And hope you all wont take this thing too personal...dont be mad... diana Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/8b479714c2981449a34f1f582adc8fb2.jpg ...ljubim...<3
bhman65 Posted May 21, 2005 Author Posted May 21, 2005 You make a good point but the reason I write is so that I can share it with people. If I kept it to myself nothing would ever happen to it. Even if it is a negative subject, in my opinion, thats what makes a good song. Quote Get away fromME Gimme my space back You gotta justGO I’ve kept it in but now I’m letting you KNOW I’ve let you go
Recommended Posts
Join the conversation
You can post now and register later. If you have an account, sign in now to post with your account.