DarknessLover Posted August 9, 2007 Posted August 9, 2007 OMFGGGGG <3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3 I LOVE IT I didn't really thing you could actually whip that situation into lyrics like that! NICE WORK!!! Quote The Park is Back? No way!
diana Posted August 9, 2007 Posted August 9, 2007 It's very nice...I like it...I'm gonna say it again...you're good, girl... Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/8b479714c2981449a34f1f582adc8fb2.jpg ...ljubim...<3
Jeezy Posted August 9, 2007 Posted August 9, 2007 it's nice...seems like you don't have a writers block anymore Quote
Greyfoxx Posted August 9, 2007 Author Posted August 9, 2007 Thanks ya'll. I'm glad ya like it. ^_^ No more writers block for Teh Foxxeh Ladeh Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/597b7053e7f6b9db3d3e47081db54c76.jpg youre so freaking gothic fox' date=' just wait till you meet the emo me. youre like redheaded vampira or something[/quote'] http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/aac84d56c4349b6631041cd70d25f813.gif
Sygy Posted August 9, 2007 Posted August 9, 2007 i really like the raw anger, very alanis morrisette if i may add! Quote iam mors sola fuga est [broken External Image]:http://img409.imageshack.us/img409/9977/n76430001741552817731hb2.jpg
Greyfoxx Posted August 31, 2007 Author Posted August 31, 2007 Sitting alone in a darkened room Feeling as if this is my tomb No reason for me to leave Unless people start to believe That myths can be true That we live through the ages Our kind exist And we roam the world Looking Searching for our place As if it was a race To see what we can find To past the never-ending time We have a gift But we suffer the curse Of knowing our fate Of seeing the life be lived in others A life we can no longer have We lust for only one thing The life force of everyone Everything We take what we cannot have We wait for night to come And our lives begin For some short hours We live again. Until the time comes When we must retreat from the rising sun And hide like animals Till we can come out once more We are…immortals. Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/597b7053e7f6b9db3d3e47081db54c76.jpg youre so freaking gothic fox' date=' just wait till you meet the emo me. youre like redheaded vampira or something[/quote'] http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/aac84d56c4349b6631041cd70d25f813.gif
Victim Posted August 31, 2007 Posted August 31, 2007 Very nice.. Vampires are cool, so I really enjoyed this.. I like have you had some ryhming lines and then others weren't.. Flows well, great content.. Very nice.. Love it. 1 Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/305186a372bb061b2ab713febbdc560a.jpg
Greyfoxx Posted August 31, 2007 Author Posted August 31, 2007 OOoo thanks so much Vic!!! *tackle hugs* Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/597b7053e7f6b9db3d3e47081db54c76.jpg youre so freaking gothic fox' date=' just wait till you meet the emo me. youre like redheaded vampira or something[/quote'] http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/aac84d56c4349b6631041cd70d25f813.gif
Jeezy Posted August 31, 2007 Posted August 31, 2007 I think the last line is what makes it really strong. The whole thing is great but the last line makes it untouchable. Quote
Greyfoxx Posted August 31, 2007 Author Posted August 31, 2007 I think the last line is what makes it really strong. The whole thing is great but the last line makes it untouchable. Thankies. I re-read the poem and decided it needed that line.... may i ask why u think its "untouchable"? Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/597b7053e7f6b9db3d3e47081db54c76.jpg youre so freaking gothic fox' date=' just wait till you meet the emo me. youre like redheaded vampira or something[/quote'] http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/aac84d56c4349b6631041cd70d25f813.gif
Jeezy Posted August 31, 2007 Posted August 31, 2007 Thankies. I re-read the poem and decided it needed that line.... may i ask why u think its "untouchable"? Well....hard to explain I just think no one on here can reach your level in poetry writing Quote
Greyfoxx Posted August 31, 2007 Author Posted August 31, 2007 Well....hard to explain I just think no one on here can reach your level in poetry writing awww. thanks sooo much. *snuffles* I think i'm gonna cry. I always get like this when i hear something like that. Thanks so much though, you have no idea how much that means to me. Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/597b7053e7f6b9db3d3e47081db54c76.jpg youre so freaking gothic fox' date=' just wait till you meet the emo me. youre like redheaded vampira or something[/quote'] http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/aac84d56c4349b6631041cd70d25f813.gif
Jeezy Posted August 31, 2007 Posted August 31, 2007 awww. thanks sooo much. *snuffles* I think i'm gonna cry. I always get like this when i hear something like that. Thanks so much though, you have no idea how much that means to me. awww...no problem...and I truly mean it like I said it *hugs* Quote
Greyfoxx Posted August 31, 2007 Author Posted August 31, 2007 awww...no problem...and I truly mean it like I said it *hugs* :'(:'( thanksssss *hugs* Thats so unbelievably nice.... Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/597b7053e7f6b9db3d3e47081db54c76.jpg youre so freaking gothic fox' date=' just wait till you meet the emo me. youre like redheaded vampira or something[/quote'] http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/aac84d56c4349b6631041cd70d25f813.gif
LPShinodaFM Posted August 31, 2007 Posted August 31, 2007 I love your writing Greyfoxx! They're though provoking and deep. Really, really nice stuff. Quote
Greyfoxx Posted August 31, 2007 Author Posted August 31, 2007 I love your writing Greyfoxx! They're though provoking and deep. Really, really nice stuff. thanks a lot! *hugs* I'm glad ya like it!!!! Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/597b7053e7f6b9db3d3e47081db54c76.jpg youre so freaking gothic fox' date=' just wait till you meet the emo me. youre like redheaded vampira or something[/quote'] http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/aac84d56c4349b6631041cd70d25f813.gif
Sygy Posted August 31, 2007 Posted August 31, 2007 rather queen of the damn-ish,like it! Quote iam mors sola fuga est [broken External Image]:http://img409.imageshack.us/img409/9977/n76430001741552817731hb2.jpg
DarknessLover Posted September 1, 2007 Posted September 1, 2007 Whoa, that one creeped me out...lol I like it, since it gives you this feel of paranoia lol...It's really cool Quote The Park is Back? No way!
littleblackstone Posted September 4, 2007 Posted September 4, 2007 I love your writing Greyfoxx! They're though provoking and deep. Really, really nice stuff. absolutely agreed!!! have nothing else to say... just keep writing!! Quote
diana Posted September 4, 2007 Posted September 4, 2007 It's definitely a very strong poem...I'm not really diggin this theme but it's beautiful anyway...great job once again!^^ Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/8b479714c2981449a34f1f582adc8fb2.jpg ...ljubim...<3
Greyfoxx Posted September 6, 2007 Author Posted September 6, 2007 Tortured Surrounded by a suspicious lot Wondering what they are about to plot If their intentions are cruel That they won’t follow the rules. Whatever they try to do to me My soul and mind shall always be free. “Submit her to torture,” I hear them say “Keep her there for about twenty days” I keep my calm as they tie me up My mouth stays quiet as they lift me up. The satisfaction, I will not give them Of knowing that to me, they sure offend. I wince when they turn their back So they don’t see how I react. My mind concentrates on what they don’t know What they try to get me to show I’m trained never to give them my secret I’ll always be able to keep it Torture chambers fill with my own blood As I fall to the ground with a thud They grow weary with my resistance As I stand and take a calm stance Prisoner of war they call me They claim they will never set me free When they leave, I set to my plan Preparing myself to go on the lam Kicking a hole in the wall I see the bricks come out and fall Starved I may be But fitting through the hole sets me free. Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/597b7053e7f6b9db3d3e47081db54c76.jpg youre so freaking gothic fox' date=' just wait till you meet the emo me. youre like redheaded vampira or something[/quote'] http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/aac84d56c4349b6631041cd70d25f813.gif
DarknessLover Posted September 6, 2007 Posted September 6, 2007 Is this like about the first day of school? i wrote one but it sucks >.< lol I like this alot, it keeps your evil mind in it, but with that feel of Greyfoxx all over it..like pie! lol Quote The Park is Back? No way!
Victim Posted September 6, 2007 Posted September 6, 2007 Ohh wow, intense.. Nice one.. One of your best aswell.. and yeah, I can kinda get the school fell DL, lol.. But i was thinking more along war lines. Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/305186a372bb061b2ab713febbdc560a.jpg
DarknessLover Posted September 6, 2007 Posted September 6, 2007 Isn't school war? lmfao Quote The Park is Back? No way!
littleblackstone Posted September 6, 2007 Posted September 6, 2007 Tortured Surrounded by a suspicious lot Wondering what they are about to plot If their intentions are cruel That they won’t follow the rules. Whatever they try to do to me My soul and mind shall always be free. “Submit her to torture,” I hear them say “Keep her there for about twenty days” I keep my calm as they tie me up My mouth stays quiet as they lift me up. The satisfaction, I will not give them Of knowing that to me, they sure offend. I wince when they turn their back So they don’t see how I react. My mind concentrates on what they don’t know What they try to get me to show I’m trained never to give them my secret I’ll always be able to keep it Torture chambers fill with my own blood As I fall to the ground with a thud They grow weary with my resistance As I stand and take a calm stance Prisoner of war they call me They claim they will never set me free When they leave, I set to my plan Preparing myself to go on the lam Kicking a hole in the wall I see the bricks come out and fall Starved I may be But fitting through the hole sets me free. congratz Foxxy!!!!!!!! Quote
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