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It's very nice...I like it...I'm gonna say it again...you're good, girl...

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Thanks ya'll. I'm glad ya like it. ^_^ No more writers block for Teh Foxxeh Ladeh

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i really like the raw anger, very alanis morrisette if i may add!

 

iam mors sola fuga est

 

 

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Sitting alone in a darkened room

Feeling as if this is my tomb

No reason for me to leave

Unless people start to believe

That myths can be true

That we live through the ages

Our kind exist

And we roam the world

Looking

Searching for our place

As if it was a race

To see what we can find

To past the never-ending time

We have a gift

But we suffer the curse

Of knowing our fate

Of seeing the life be lived in others

A life we can no longer have

We lust for only one thing

The life force of everyone

Everything

We take what we cannot have

We wait for night to come

And our lives begin

For some short hours

We live again.

Until the time comes

When we must retreat from the rising sun

And hide like animals

Till we can come out once more

We are…immortals.

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Very nice.. Vampires are cool, so I really enjoyed this.. I like have you had some ryhming lines and then others weren't.. Flows well, great content.. Very nice.. Love it.
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OOoo thanks so much Vic!!! *tackle hugs*

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I think the last line is what makes it really strong.

 

The whole thing is great but the last line makes it untouchable.

 

Thankies. I re-read the poem and decided it needed that line.... may i ask why u think its "untouchable"?

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Thankies. I re-read the poem and decided it needed that line.... may i ask why u think its "untouchable"?

 

Well....hard to explain

 

I just think no one on here can reach your level in poetry writing

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Well....hard to explain

 

I just think no one on here can reach your level in poetry writing

 

awww. thanks sooo much. *snuffles* I think i'm gonna cry. I always get like this when i hear something like that. Thanks so much though, you have no idea how much that means to me.

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awww. thanks sooo much. *snuffles* I think i'm gonna cry. I always get like this when i hear something like that. Thanks so much though, you have no idea how much that means to me.

 

awww...no problem...and I truly mean it like I said it

 

*hugs*

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awww...no problem...and I truly mean it like I said it

 

*hugs*

:'(:'( thanksssss *hugs* Thats so unbelievably nice....

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I love your writing Greyfoxx! They're though provoking and deep. Really, really nice stuff.

thanks a lot! *hugs* I'm glad ya like it!!!!

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rather queen of the damn-ish,like it!

 

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Posted
It's definitely a very strong poem...I'm not really diggin this theme but it's beautiful anyway...great job once again!^^

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Tortured

 

 

Surrounded by a suspicious lot

Wondering what they are about to plot

If their intentions are cruel

That they won’t follow the rules.

Whatever they try to do to me

My soul and mind shall always be free.

“Submit her to torture,” I hear them say

“Keep her there for about twenty days”

I keep my calm as they tie me up

My mouth stays quiet as they lift me up.

The satisfaction, I will not give them

Of knowing that to me, they sure offend.

I wince when they turn their back

So they don’t see how I react.

My mind concentrates on what they don’t know

What they try to get me to show

I’m trained never to give them my secret

I’ll always be able to keep it

Torture chambers fill with my own blood

As I fall to the ground with a thud

They grow weary with my resistance

As I stand and take a calm stance

Prisoner of war they call me

They claim they will never set me free

When they leave, I set to my plan

Preparing myself to go on the lam

Kicking a hole in the wall

I see the bricks come out and fall

Starved I may be

 

But fitting through the hole sets me free.

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Posted
Ohh wow, intense.. Nice one.. One of your best aswell.. and yeah, I can kinda get the school fell DL, lol.. But i was thinking more along war lines.

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Tortured

 

 

Surrounded by a suspicious lot

Wondering what they are about to plot

If their intentions are cruel

That they won’t follow the rules.

Whatever they try to do to me

My soul and mind shall always be free.

“Submit her to torture,” I hear them say

“Keep her there for about twenty days”

I keep my calm as they tie me up

My mouth stays quiet as they lift me up.

The satisfaction, I will not give them

Of knowing that to me, they sure offend.

I wince when they turn their back

So they don’t see how I react.

My mind concentrates on what they don’t know

What they try to get me to show

I’m trained never to give them my secret

I’ll always be able to keep it

Torture chambers fill with my own blood

As I fall to the ground with a thud

They grow weary with my resistance

As I stand and take a calm stance

Prisoner of war they call me

They claim they will never set me free

When they leave, I set to my plan

Preparing myself to go on the lam

Kicking a hole in the wall

I see the bricks come out and fall

Starved I may be

 

But fitting through the hole sets me free.

 

congratz Foxxy!!!!!!!! :D

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