Foxx's Poetry Corner

[Jeezy]

That one scared me a little...but I like it....

[Greyfoxx]

Jeezy-Sorry if it might have scared you, i was in a uber-bad mood

[chaz-girl-fanatic1730760665]

lol it's scary yes but i think it's AWEEEEEEEESOME^^

(have i already said that i love your poems

[Jeezy]

Jeezy-Sorry if it might have scared you' date=' i was in a uber-bad mood[/quote']

It's not scarry in a bad way...as I said...I really like it

[Greyfoxx]

My Fight

 

This time is growing longer

This place is growing darker

My mind is calm

My thoughts are clear

This night has come near

The spirits have come forth

To this graveyard where they lay

The thoughts of those departed

My eyes shed one single tear

The tear rolls off my face

The fate of my life is sealed

Destiny has its hold upon me

Though I will never go down

Not without a fighting stance

I will fight to the end of time

I promise this to myself

I will never give up on those I love

I will fight for them.

Fight….

[Jeezy]

Cool one...I really like it...but you already did better stuff...keep some for the writing competition...lol

[Greyfoxx]

i'll have plenety of stuffs for the comp. that was just something i did in computers class cause i was bored

[LPpinkfreak821]

 

My Poem

When I am sad and look into your eyes

I see your great sense of pride.

Eventhough you might be far away

I feel your presense anyway.

You, the one who makes my knees weak

Even when you speak.

With you I feel alive and well.

Our love is strong enough that we'll tell,

"I love you forever and always"

I believe it will never fray.

Within your arms, I'm true to my heart

When we talk, It's almost an art.

In my Heart I know it's true,

That I'll be by your side through and through.

 

 

 

OH EM GEE! I LOVE THIS! I mean it's beautiful. Your are really talented. I wish I were that good, actually.

 

 

I love all four [i think there was 4... right?] poems. Their beautiful and very well writtien. Their pretty much amazing. But that one up there ^ is probably my favorite. That and The Fight one.

[Greyfoxx]

OH EM GEE! I LOVE THIS! I mean it's beautiful. Your are really talented. I wish I were that good, actually.

 

 

I love all four [i think there was 4... right?] poems. Their beautiful and very well writtien. Their pretty much amazing. But that one up there ^ is probably my favorite. That and The Fight one.

THANK YOU soooo much. its nice to know you like em!!!!

[Greyfoxx]

Light Of Hope

 

Believe in something

Believe in something grand

Hope in something that you believe in

Hope keeps us strong

It keeps us going on

In the face of terror

In the sight of uncertainty

A light of Hope shines on

And you go for that irresistible light.

The light of Hope.

 

As you face doubt

As you have a flood of grief

You remember what you Hope for

You realize that its’ still there

Between the thoughts of concern

You remain Hopeful for your Dream

Don’t ever let it fade

Or else you shall have no reason to go on

You will feel no reason to survive

No reason to live

But if you keep the Hope

Keep it true

You will always go on

Always Hopeful for the future…

[Ravynlee]

Hey Foxxy, well I finally read it (The Fight). What strikes me more than even the emotion in this one is the way its structured. Each sentence is short, sharp and to the point. Coupled with the theme its almost a verbal attack, if you want to put it that way, without today's contemporarily-acceptible sarcasm. The ending is good too... feels like drawing a literary breath just before stepping into battle... which I guess is the idea, right?

 

 

As for the second one, (Light of Hope) it was good, but not as good, structurally as far as I'm concerned. Its just my humble opinion. Its very... positive. Weird. Especially after reading the previous one, very opposite in terms of theme and style. Exploring styles huh? I like that. I also admire the way you can change from predator to prey, so to speak. That was noice.

 

Anyways, all good. Noice work my gurl. Rant over for today.

:thumbsup:

[Greyfoxx]

I know it isn't what i normally do..."nice stuff". I didn't write that on purpose....it was for a writing club i am in. we do "THEME" writing and 'Hope' Was the theme for this next meetings....i was experimenting with it because i had to write it.

 

as for "The Fight" compliment-You are very right mum. You do such a good job with interpritating(sp?) my writing and what i am 'doing' in the writing. I think that "The Fight" is one of my favorite works....

[Jeezy]

That Light of hope one...is really great...reminds me of my own poem I did for the competition.... cool stuff

[Greyfoxx]

This is a poem that i made for no reason....or did i??? (and to those who think i wont have anything for the writing comp.....you're sadly mistaken)

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

In this time

In this place

You can’t even see His face.

Your mind is racing

Your heart is on fire

Your sight blurred.

My voice rings out in your ear

You let out a river of tears.

You walk blindly around

In this darkened town.

The wind howls

The forest creaks

You can’t even speak.

This town has no life

Except to your spite

You and me

And that thing makes three.

What is it?

Over there beyond the grave

It is calling out to you

What will you do?!

These things happening

These terrors around you

Your fears Realized

Your heart and mind cries.

This moment lasts forever

You don’t know what will happen

Till you Shock yourself awake

You’re in your room now

Sweat amid Your brow

You convince yourself it was but a dream

You are safe now in the house

But you still hear my voice

So was it a dream?

Or

Was it real?

Were you there?

In that haunted place?

Or was it just a dream of fate?

[Jeezy]

wow...another great poem...damn...you are so good

[Cyro]

Your poem's are indeed good. This one has a surreal feeling, give me visuals and stuff. I like it, you got talent. But you already know that I hope.

[Greyfoxx]

Thank you Cyro. It means a lot!!!! *hugs*

[Ravynlee]

Wow! I loved that one Fox! The way you wrote it was ... wow, very clever. It seemed to gather pace along with the frantic thoughts of someone fearful of their grip on reality and each small stanza was like drawing a breath, it fluctuated and grew lesser and sharper just like one does when having a panic attack!

Wow!

The end, that 'or...' that was brilliant. It turned the whole 'darkness' before it on its head. You really are left questioning was it real or not? Its almost devious at the end... 'you and me and that thing make three,' for some reason that leapt out at me. It plays to everyone I think because we all at some point, if only as kids, been afraid of the unknown lurking there in the dark and its the unseen 'thing' that terrifies us the most! Its the basis of any good horror story! The ryhme was good, I especially admire the way you didnt fall into the second line 'repeat' or having each and every single sentence rhyme and echo the sentence above, cause that has a tendency to make some writings seem almost juvenille... well, depends on the context, but the rhyme made it flow and gave it a sense of unity. It wasn't all over the place even if it wasn't typically structured. But this style of writing is showing maturity as well as playing to a sense of childlike wonder and fear, and yeah... damn... it was just awesome.

Really. No crap. One of your best. Sorry I took so long to get my butt over and read it! And sorry for the rant, but it was SWISH!! I know I sound like an eighth grade english teacher when I rant like this but its what I get from it when I read good writing and wouldn't you rather me tell you honestly what I think in a constructive manner than just go along with the crowd and say it was great (even if they are still very right in their opinions ??

Anyway, more like this and you will win the competition Foxxy, hands down!

:thumbsup:

Keep it up

[Greyfoxx]

Hollow

 

 

 

Emptiness is in me

An echo of a soul

But I’m not free

I am a hollow being.

No emotion

No excitement

Hollow

They have torn my soul from me

Bringing me to this life

Took the thought

Stole my mind

Left me a hollow vessel

Wandering the earth.

They saw me as a threat

Saw the potential for greatness

And took it from me

Ripped me from my fate

And left me here

As a hollow thing

I do not feel

I do not cry

Hollow is hell

Yet they do not know

Everything that I did

Even though they took it all

They do not understand

Yet here I am

Hollow

[chaz-girl-fanatic1730760665]

omg YEEEEEEEEAAAAAAH YOU'RE WRITING!!!!!!!

*be happy* it's REALLY wonderful,magical,great,awesome....^^

[Jeezy]

That's another great piece of work

[Greyfoxx]

thanks ya'll

i figured i'd write since i havent posted anything on here in a while

 

~~Foxx~~

[jackie]

that was the best poem ever

[LPShinodaFM]

...undescribable... and a picture means a thousand words.... so....

 

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There you go, 5000 words

[Greyfoxx]

thank you all....yer so nice