Foxx's Poetry Corner

[LPpinkfreak821]

wow I've missed a lot. I only had time to read the more recent ones and I have to say that they are amazing. I love your work. You're a really good writer.

 

I absolutley LOVE Freedom For A Forgotton Land. It's really Imaginative

[Stenners]

Pretty good well described, some of it seemed a lil cheesey though if im honest but u wrote it well <3 good job x

[Friðbjörn]

very adventurelike

very unrealistic just the same...but isn't that what we want sometimes, fantasy, break from the mundane reality...this is a good example of escape from reality

 

makes you wonder

[By_My-elf]

Wow thats good

I like how it's like a story and yet a poem...

It's REALLY GOOD!!!!!

I like it.

[Greyfoxx]

awww, thanks everyone. Ya'll so nice to me.

 

I was going for Super-Natural since it was for my Sci-Fi class! Lmao

[Greyfoxx]

Just One More

 

Verse One

I sit here alone

Dealing with my thoughts

I sit here in my home

Thinking of you

So why can’t I get you

Out of my head?

And why can’t I get rid

Of the thoughts of you?

 

 

Chorus

You say my name

And it makes me quiver

You smile at me

And it makes me wonder

How would life be like?

If I had you?

If all I had was you?

 

 

Verse Two

My heart is aching

At the thought of you

My mind is racing

When I can’t have you

I know that I need you

I know it now

But I can’t see how

The thoughts in my head

The feelings inside

They all say the same thing

“Go To Him.”

Yet I can’t get myself

To Go to You!

 

 

Chorus

 

 

Ending

Say my name again

Tug at my heart again

Look me in the eyes

And so those words again

Please…

Just once again.

[MrsBennington-Delson]

WOW!!!

 

I... I... I love it!!! It's awesome!!!

 

btw are you reading my mind? lol

[Jeezy]

I know you put a lot of work in your stuff...but to be honest...I'm not feeling this one so much...but still nice work

[Greyfoxx]

WOW!!!

 

I... I... I love it!!! It's awesome!!!

 

btw are you reading my mind? lol

lol....maybe, why?

 

I know you put a lot of work in your stuff...but to be honest...I'm not feeling this one so much...but still nice work

Honestly i'm not as happy with this one, but this was a spur-of-the-moment-"I'm Bored In Class" ones.

[LPpinkfreak821]

I.Love.It.Like.Crazy.

 

It's pretty and like I can relate to it in a way. mhm.

[Stenners]

I like ur stuff usualy but this one really didnt do it for me sorry x

[Greyfoxx]

A Mothers’ day Poem

 

 

This is a poem I make for you

The mother who’s believed in me

The one who is always by my side

Cheering me on to go for the Best.

I know I haven’t been the perfect daughter

Back-talking, ignoring, and things of that sort

But even thought I’m not perfect

You still say, “I always love you.”

You’ve dealt with pain I can only imagine

But you still put a smile on your face.

Three kids you brought into this world

And for this I am glad.

We’ve never figured out how to show how much we care

But I guess I’ll give it a shot

Seventeen years ago I became your child

And for Seventeen years you’ve guided me

So no, I’ll show you how much I truly care

By giving you this poem

Straight from my heart.

I don’t know if my brother and sister have said this enough

But I’ll say it for myself

I love you Mom, and Always Will.

Love,

Greyfoxx

Dedicated to My Mum, the best mom a girl can ask for

[DarknessLover]

Holy god Greyfoxx, that's an amazing poem! I LOOOVEEE IT

 

I really loved it, it really sounds like you love your mom.

 

GREAT WORK!!

[Stenners]

Very nice

heart felt

poe m

[Friðbjörn]

well written, really beautiful

 

don't think I could've said anything like this better to my mum with my own little words

[Jeezy]

That's so nice...

 

you really gotta love your mum

[Greyfoxx]

Revived By You

 

Intro:

My sight is blurred

Vision denied to me

My thoughts are tainted

They aren't my own

 

Verse One:

When i lost sight of myself

You were there to guide me.

I broke down in Pain

Yet you comforted my soul.

If tears were in my eyes

You'd Settle all my cries.

When I'd scream for Help

You were there to answer my call

 

Chorus:

When i was down

A guiding soul helped me up

When i thought I'd die

An Angel revived my soul.

It took away my fear

Took away my doubt

And now...

I believe in myself

 

Verse Two:

You told me to sing my heart out

So here I am

Singing to the Angel

Who saved my soul!

Brought me back from the dark

Into the Music

Into the Light

This feels so damn right

 

Chorus x2

 

 

 

 

dedicated to a certian person who has been helping me through tough times

[MrsBennington-Delson]

honestly i have to say that i couldnt really feel the rhythm... but besides of my 'rhythm-problems' lol I really like it!!

and you know what? this is one reason why i dont write poems/lyrics that much bc you bring out everything i would write just in a waaaaaaay better way :D:D

[Jeezy]

I don't want to repeat myself

 

but it's another good one

 

you are just awesome

[Greyfoxx]

I've had mixed reviews. The guy i wrote this for/about said it was awesome, so thank ya'll for commenting!!! ^_^ *hugs ya'll and gives ya cookies*

[Friðbjörn]

feels good to read, great job

[Stenners]

pretty good, not ye best but thats only cause u set urself radiculousy high standards!

[Stllmn8j]

You are an amazing lyricist!

[Greyfoxx]

Thank you bunches ya'll. Yer comments are taken to heart. I luv ya'll so much for just readin em. *hugz*

[diana]

Foxx, I'm so sorry I haven't checked out your stuff here before...even though you asked me to do it...hope you're not too mad...

 

Anyway, I like Just One More...I think only a person going through the similar thing can really feel it...

 

A poem for your mother is sweet...did you give it to her? What was her response like?

 

Revived By You is good...but I guess I'm the only one who thinks that Just One More is better, lol...yeah, my taste is fucked up...