Town of the Living Dead

[UnknownOrigin]

Its just that i have never seen a zombie story with 1st person being used as the POV. Usually its a 3rd person type of story

[DarknessLover]

Does that make mine worse in general?

[UnknownOrigin]

nooo not at all, it makes it all the more intresting, its a different kind, but a good kind of different, and it keeps the reader wondering what will happen next, because 3rd person usually gives away what would happen next

[DarknessLover]

My friends say I have mastered the art of suspense ^.^ lol

 

Yeah I think I may add a new chapter sometime in this next week.

[UnknownOrigin]

Thanks man, il continue tryin to get people to come read the storys...Hey and your friends right

[DarknessLover]

I feel as though the chapters are too short though...are they?

[UnknownOrigin]

Some of them are depateable, but majority of them are all good lengths, but it might help if you made some of them a bit longer, like i said, a few of them are depateable

[DarknessLover]

Yeah I need to keep that in mind

[DarknessLover]

New chapter in the works...

[DarknessLover]

Chapter 15 - I'm Back

 

"Hawk" I stared him down, the red in his eye was very peculiar. He had blood on his shirt, almost as if he were shot. "New scar?"

 

Hawk stared at me, I had a feeling he wouldn't attack right away. "Yeah, some dumb bitch shot at me" I knew he was shot! May it have been Michelle? I need to get her...leaving me for dead in the hospital. He appeared to be studying me. "Doing pretty well I can see."

 

I saw his arm reaching at his knife, I slowly reached down to mine. Before I knew it, we both had our hands on our knives. Hawk opened his mouth, he was a statue, strong, and very powerful, with a hint of boldness, "You won't be doing well after this."

 

Hawk threw his knife at my arm, I spun to the side, and ran at him with my knife. He pulled another knife as I swung at his neck, and he slashed my knife away. He swung at my waist, I pulled back and punched him in the face with my left arm. He got knocked back. I held my knife out waiting for his next attack.

 

Hawk starred at me, and stood his position. "Jason, you need to learn to give up. You can't dfeat me, no one can." He disappeared, in the thin air. Where did he go? The feel of wind behind me startled me, I spun around to see Hawk standing there. "No one." I felt the metal ripping threw the flesh of my leg. The cool feel numbed my body. I stood up straight, noticing he was gone again.

 

How the fuck is he doing this!? There is no way this is human...I felt the wind again, and swung my knife around behind me, feeling the clang. "You get smart, but you're not going to be quick enough." once he finished that line. I stood ready, nothing....

 

The sudden wind startled me, and I swung at it, miss, but I saw him. Wind again, swung and I felt a clang. Wind, swung, miss. Wind, swung, clang. Wind, swung, clung. Wind, swung, nothing? Wind swung, nothing. Wind, swung nothing!?

 

I felt uneasy, he's here but he is getting to quick. I needed to be better defended than just a knife. The sudden air I ignored, but I felt the cool metal in my back....

[DarknessLover]

You see? I write and no one reads!!! :Angry:

[UnknownOrigin]

Hey...i read it, i just didnt have the time to make a reply...when i read it, i was goin to go in like 2 mins!

[DarknessLover]

So...what's your reaction/reply?

[UnknownOrigin]

i like it alot and i am looking forward to seeing the rest of the story unfold...

[UnknownOrigin]

dude, continue on with this, im so eagerly awaiting the next part

[DarknessLover]

Dude, I hate to be a dick, but I am not continuing this story, I will be writing a new one soon, just once I gather up my notes, and set up my planned plot

[DarknessLover]

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