Person Posted May 15, 2007 Posted May 15, 2007 Our Silence Our Exordium was wept by nothing which can express these foreign disturbances I met both bleeding eyes in surprise Awaiting reply Your silence only cryptically crept over the crevice of my lip Solemn dalliance devirginiating my subsistence With the hostility of demons devouring angels Your comatose event The petals of my rose ensorcelled, rotten to their fibers cast upon the frigid earth I slumber with the detritus reflecting My silence... Can you please tell me what all of this means? I was once beyond mind but not this time. Quote
Person Posted May 15, 2007 Author Posted May 15, 2007 Crystal Tears I took one taste of your sin , my mind spun into a cataclysm of dreaded beautiful nightmares, yet in my disbelief; you held me The glorious price of agony I paid to be your savior, here it's me-only me taming that which you fear what was that thing I felt? Weaving-grinding-in-through me like possibility shattering a silhouette of all feelings wept Dying faithlessly in your eyes, still hoping, confronting all your lies, never wanting Crystal tears from my eyes, I regret the most, For them to realize, it's you who stole my truth... Thorns splicing everything without a name, here I lay, your slain-angel in pain. Quote
DarknessLover Posted May 15, 2007 Posted May 15, 2007 Wow, lot's of fancy words! I Didn't understand one of them! Ha ha I still like the way it sounded and felt on the tounge Quote The Park is Back? No way!
Person Posted May 15, 2007 Author Posted May 15, 2007 Mistaken Mislead to my unfortunate. Here I wait for you under the blood soaked stars In the cloak of the night I cry out to you My weeping is absorbed not by you but by something other "Give it a name Give it a name Give it a name..." Is all that can be reflected into the mind from a standpoint I divulge inside the absence questioning me still your pupils excrete interrogations that I will always leave unanswered what remains of me will remain of you and so I'll repeat the verse as if I've sung it before... "Abro mi corazón en la elasticidad fuera de lo que temo la mayoria En este momento ahora revelado: aqui miente mi fantasma" Quote
Person Posted May 15, 2007 Author Posted May 15, 2007 Wow, lot's of fancy words! I Didn't understand one of them! Ha ha I still like the way it sounded and felt on the tounge hehehe thanks... sorta felt I should post some of my stuff *nods* Quote
Person Posted May 15, 2007 Author Posted May 15, 2007 Before... Could not the glass of a thousand not the glass of a million not the glass of a many break down the passion within the world Crack the fragile, bleeding sympathy of the backbone of nature with Man's wars and armageddon Make me vomit again and again and again Tomorrow and tomorrow and tomorrow For his shrunk shank and his big manly voice Proving again to us that we're just flickers Floaters and free replaceable spirits of a sphere of a globe where no gravity grows no control But in seconds of desperate hours of pre-measured sicklied time I cry out to you, you and only you like a vulture crying to its corpse created crease prey Pray I do, unto you : Ave... Gratia pleana, dominus tecum Benedicta tu...nostrae. The healing has scattered but my memories of thee, have not Please come back to me Before it is we Before it is you Before it is me Before it is all forgot Quote
Person Posted May 15, 2007 Author Posted May 15, 2007 Revisit I am the false truth, hidden underneath every loose flaw, nothing you can do , will prove, all the damage you've left to do, Why this again, bringing it back before... Weakness eating me, your hate inspiring the unsaid Would you still want me after I expire? Burning in desires fire Closer,farther we separate, Victim to isolation,never great I stand waiting, but the demon of desecration will not stop, losing, losing ,losing, another drop... Every second racing, and flowering with what I've not said[all the dread] I stole your tears from you, the owner who's love I [cannot] rebuke But will you lay me down to sleep, hold me, for I'm yours to keep, Do not let the others prey, suffering, with night nor day, Banishment I cannot pay, Keep me here in your grasp, unforgettably I'll be your last Love, I'm here to stay.... No longer one wanted, as I am hunted, by no other way of will I force into your kill, sweetly as the stars and skies, bleed blood sick, keep me,keep me,keep me close, my sins run thin,losing your touch,I slip ....I'm whole within. Quote
Person Posted May 15, 2007 Author Posted May 15, 2007 The Dove okay this piece is entitled "the dove". Since this is art, it's open to anyone's interpretation and criticism. this is along the lines of how something pure,and holy thus the "dove" representing righteousness/innocence,etc. is conformed, manipulated, and raped by society,man,and the stray messenger pigeons(the pigeons being peers to the dove). I started it off like this...though it requires more editing... I'll comfort thee with serenity, do not look for me, for I am your destiny With broken wings, the ability to fly is nothing more than a mere lie, I cannot send messages, as the pigeons do, when my wings are no longer glued, but instead severed and heavily weathered, I'll visit those in pain, with nothing more to gain , do not feel ashamed , this sinner has become persecuted just as you've been wrongly macerated, is it a striking shame , in which no other can claim, but only inflict a rain of pain upon my broken wings, of which I've tried rigorously to soar, when my limbs no longer work anymore, becoming more sore and sore, and therefore no more may I help thee, observe what you've done to me: hunted [me] far and wide, by men with no pride , why am I even still alive? Shot down by man, with his wicked firearm in hand, how he knows only how to pollute the truth of how I will never be apart of the rest of the flock of these pigeons, Whom's rage he's inflicted upon me, a wrath so divine that keeps spitting in my mind, is this why I'm not like the rest of the messengers ? Why must I be the one to pay the price? Who could ever select me! The no name dove. The empty vitality. 1 Quote
MrsBennington-Delson Posted May 16, 2007 Posted May 16, 2007 :eek::eek::eek::eek::eek::eek::eek: me loves it Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/f03af096463589b6a2bebdd0c1455573.jpg
Peterdea Posted May 16, 2007 Posted May 16, 2007 i realy like all of these, something about the way you write these are just awesome!!! Quote Its good to be back.
Jeezy Posted May 16, 2007 Posted May 16, 2007 Wow, lot's of fancy words! I Didn't understand one of them! Ha ha I still like the way it sounded and felt on the tounge I agree with that:D Quote
Person Posted May 16, 2007 Author Posted May 16, 2007 Kiss Everytime I told you the truth Love came out of your mouth What was hurting me was hurting you and I couldn't control the thought of leaving you. I acted selfish by ignoring you, you acted selfish by not caring for me. Nothing burdens me more inside like the wrenching I get by you, make me feel alive. Making me feel alive. Feel Alive. Alive. I blame you I blame me I blame the things that couldn't be worser than all of me Still by sound, I'm on your way I never once, meant to hurt you I never once, felt such joy We never once, felt such love No more forgiving for the past No more re-living for the past Let the time run through Tidal wave time. I know I mattered somewhere? Somewhere, where I made my silhouette I'm not the only one ending up like this: There's nothing to lose anymore, for I know what is hidden beyond becoming beautiful. Quote
MrsBennington-Delson Posted May 17, 2007 Posted May 17, 2007 nice.... very nice... i really have to quote Pete something about the way you write these are just awesome!!! :thumbsup: Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/f03af096463589b6a2bebdd0c1455573.jpg
Person Posted May 17, 2007 Author Posted May 17, 2007 Thanks Jos! Pete! When I'm with You Sometimes it becomes a danger to think Showing love without all that matters to disguise myself. No I'm not alive to myself anymore, than I am to the world, so my love, to yourself- die away. But if I could bleed But if I could see all the mystery, fulfilling thee, then , please make it to be, the exact same thing it could be, by allowing hurt to me by flowering harm to be. Not so endlessly until I begin to see I'm killing all of me. No more apologies; I've stole them all. I just want to be your love All that matters to the sun All that shatters to the stars, and the moon I cannot say, but love, to would be able to, to love to, to keep them to, to love, able to, to all without. To all without guilt of destruction, without guilt of corruption, I loved to thee. And I'm all of me, wasting the days, subconsciously keeping by you, all of me Never to return never to be The Angel, I promised to thee Quote
Person Posted May 17, 2007 Author Posted May 17, 2007 Savour Saviour Make use of the apple from the garden Ponder the core of sweet potency Take its seeds that be not forgotten Plant the placid possibility If all but one tree fails to produce Use temptation as an excuse Quote
Person Posted July 14, 2007 Author Posted July 14, 2007 *bump* comments on my poetry? yes? ok =P Quote
twilightcrimson7 Posted July 14, 2007 Posted July 14, 2007 "Savor Savior"- Very short and witty. Title has a nice pun I like the couplet at the end. Gives it personality Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/caa111db447cb1d28d713cebad979c8d.png ...:away and onward:...
Person Posted July 20, 2007 Author Posted July 20, 2007 Questions from the Dearly Departed If I died would you care? I mean, what if I was no longer there? Would the world suddenly end? Would you mourn me my friend? Would you feel such deep sorrow, That you'd care not of tomorrow? Would you somehow honor me? Could that set your conscience free? Would people I hardly knew suddenly claim to have been my close friend? Would they pledge their assistance to the cold, and bitter end? Could you survive without me? Move on and just be? How many people would attend my funeral service? Would the chapel be full and the eulogizer nervous? Who would deliver that eulogy? Would they say wonderful things about me? As my corpse lay at the front of the hall Would some be planning their afternoon at the mall? What would become of my family? All those who have grown to rely upon me. Would the show of support be overwhelming at first? But slowly diminish once they get through the worst? I would be gone, simply not here. They'd be alone to fight through the heartache and fear. So what if I died right here on the spot? Trying to finish a poem but this was as far as I got. Would I be able to write the rest in my head? Or would I just be gone, cold, and simply put, dead. The world would continue along without me Others now being where I used to be. At first my presence would still seem so strong But then slowly diminish as they all move along Of course they'd talk and say, "Remember him?" But over time these occurrences would grow increasingly slim. Simply forgotten as time wastes away My existence more vanished with each passing day The more that I ask, the better I see This question is not for you, it's more just for me. So I'll rephrase and make it concise No sugar coating to make it sound nice If I died, why should I care? It would simply just mean that I'm no longer there. Quote
MrsBennington-Delson Posted July 20, 2007 Posted July 20, 2007 oh nice one :thumbsup: pretty sad tho Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/f03af096463589b6a2bebdd0c1455573.jpg
Person Posted September 15, 2007 Author Posted September 15, 2007 Concept for a book I want to write one day. Enjoy. ---------------------------------- Above this road, with its high vantage point from far out west right through to the heart of the city, it seems a shame to share this moment alone. Cars and trucks pass by, underneath the M4 overpass. So many lives pass underneath my feet. Each car with its own destination, its own stories, its own past. My left index finger softly strokes the ring on my right. The cool metal also knows many memories, from my own past. Flashes of memories, both good and bad are brought to my eyes, which now well with tears. Roughly, I pry the ring from my finger. The resistance I feel mirrors my own reluctance to proceed. With a clasped hand, I encase the ring in darkness, so that the world cannot see it anymore. I close my eyes, and listen the sound of traffic, the rhythmic passing of constant traffic almost sending me into a trance, as I find myself being pulled back into the past once more. I find myself remembering the time I acquired the ring, and the sounds and textures in the hours after. With an ache in my heart, and a cold sweat, I find myself go limp, and in that precise moment, the ring slips from my grasp - In horror I watch my past and memories fall away from me, out of reach. I can do nothing but to see it hit the sharp asphalt below, only to be obliterated under the weight of heavy machinery. With a heavy heart, I look up into the horizon, and see not the city I love, but the skyline alight, alive with fire and hatred, contrasted with a world so cold. For hours I stare not into the distance but through it, lost in nothingness. Eventually I start to feel a shiver, it is night-time now, and the light in the sky is naught but blackness. Turning, I begin to walk back home, to a room just as dark and cold. Quote
MrsBennington-Delson Posted September 15, 2007 Posted September 15, 2007 wow! nice concept!! :thumsbup: you def should write a book!! and then let it print and all that shizzle! and make sure to send me a copy!! Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/f03af096463589b6a2bebdd0c1455573.jpg
Person Posted September 15, 2007 Author Posted September 15, 2007 I will if I ever do end up writing it, Jos. I'll actually keep working on it, and see where it goes =) Quote
MrsBennington-Delson Posted September 15, 2007 Posted September 15, 2007 I will if I ever do end up writing it, Jos. I'll actually keep working on it, and see where it goes =) ok ok cool!! Quote http://www.sucksbbs.net/data/MetaMirrorCache/f03af096463589b6a2bebdd0c1455573.jpg
crazy robster Posted September 15, 2007 Posted September 15, 2007 :eek::eek::eek: I am officially speechless Javier! You are a true talent! You know what amazes me about you? That you are only 17 (and I say only because whether we like it or not men don't mature before 25...-.-) and the way you speak and express yourself through writing is just...Awesome! Like I told you on MSN writing like that means you have a very precious soul with a lot to give. People like you tell us something. The world is not full of shallow morons...Congratulations with all my heart. And never give up on writing you are really VERY VERY GOOD! Reserve a copy of your book for me too ok? I'll be waiting! Quote [broken External Image]:http://i56.photobucket.com/albums/g189/rbffe/rob_opens-eyes.gif My sis about Rob: "You'll be celebrating your golden infatuation with him one day.."
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