Poetry

[Livie122790]

Ok, this is a poem I wrote that's kind of an elegy. I originally posted it on my deviant art but haven't really got a lot of views. I want some feedback so I figured I'd post it on here too. So give me your comments good or bad. Thanks!

 

Whispered by the wind

 

 

Listen closely my friend

To the wind from the grave.

It faintly whispers a story

Of a life lost long ago.

 

Her presence,

Now angelic,

His sorrow

Still remains.

 

The years they spent together

Ended with a grave.

Soil covers the remnants

Of his one true love.

 

A single rose is placed

On the bed of earth.

The pain resurfaces,

His tears dampen the grave.

 

Her face is lost,

Faded into obscurity,

One memory

Still remains.

 

He held her close

As they slid to the floor.

With her last breath,

I love you was whispered.

 

The last goodbye,

Shared long ago.

Her kiss now cold,

Her touch now unfelt.

 

Her life

Ended by mortality.

The love they felt lives on,

Their story immortal,

Whispered by the wind.

[FM2005]

No one commented? Well then i will

I really like it to me it flows well, im not an expert with poetry but I still write and its almost the same. To me its a good job! :thumbsup:

[Livie122790]

Thank you very much! It's nice to get some feedback.