My thugs n my gun

[non_stop]

this is a lil rhyme written by myself

its your turn to decide if its good or bad



My thugs n my gun



i came from nyc,
straight from the gettho,
i dont rap this **** for me,
i'll rap it for my black bro's,

for my bro's living in the blocks,
in the gettho straight to their thugs,
joah, thug life is not the best,
im rappin this **** cause my thugs are gettin in jail,
in the west of nyc,
they didnt get a good laywer,
they just have been,
some peace of crap,
hit the whole time,
till they're cryin,
while they were in the jail,
not even did one crime,
in the past.
they just get in jail cause of racism,
and in our stupid society,
they wont last long,
cause with these ****ing nazis they wont,
live long in their neighbourhood,
they'll get in jail no matter what,
they do... they have to go through this painful situations,
like they're driving from one to another station....

this life is so painful, there are juz a few realizing this,
i like black people, theyre nicer then the others, but they got pissed,
on the whole time, i juz would hit this **** nazis till they would cry,
if i'd see them to piss of my thug,
i'd ****ing surprise em in the dark n then i'd **** em up!
nobody is allowed to piss of my thugs!!!

this is the problem...
i'd be to aggressive if i'd see them doin this kind of ****,
i think i'd kill 'em and then i'd quit,
with my life cause if you had kill somebody you wont find a wife...
not even a girlfriend...
that would be such bad that i couldn't life anymore,
i'd jump out of the window, fall in the straws,
then stand up, run away,
i'd take my gun out n then **** up the law...

the end is tragedy, i dont want to tell ya,
i juz could tell you that i'd end up,
with two holes in my head,
shot with the 45. i had with me...
layin in a lane... in the last few moments,
i thought i had felt a lot of flames...
punishing me for what i've done...
i were so scared cause my angels were gone...
and the only way out left was one thing....

MY GUN....


Written by AKGhost
(c) Andre Klemme

 

[Friðbjörn]

If it's supposed to be rap, it's definately not good, basically no rhyme, that I can see...

If it's just poetry, I still find it so so

 

[non_stop]

ghetto - black bros
best - west
time - cryin - crime
past - last
wont - long

......

so, i think... there are rhymes for sure


greetz, non_stop

 

[Friðbjörn]

ghetto - black bros

wont - long

......

so, i think... there are rhymes for sure


greetz, non_stop

meh....might pass for a half rhyme
and those two definately don't rhyme...

sure...there was some rhyme, but not nearly enough.
I at least like to think about it this way; the more rhyme, the better the rap is.


And don't double post.

 

[Hybrid Soldier]

If it's supposed to be rap, it's definately not good, basically no rhyme, that I can see...

If it's just poetry, I still find it so so

thats because its not aabb, its abab

its pretty good, not great

 

[Friðbjörn]

1.okay I didn't litterally mean "no rhyme"
sorry if it's confusing, it's just a habit of mine to exaggerate...
2. I prolly read it too fast or unthoroughly
I still find it so so, having read it again

 

[non_stop]

THX Hybrid Soldier

@ Friðbjörn
if you'd like to see one of my good ones
ya have to search for: "my lil' rhyme... good or bad?"

i think thats a good one...



thx for your opinion...
ill think i have to practice a lot more, too.
its not nearly enough, i know...
... but i'm at the beginnin

c ya, non_stop

 

[Friðbjörn]

I remember that, that was decent
but you're German right? I must say I'm more for rappers rapping in their mother tongue, rather than English or some other 2nd language. It almost always sounds better when you rap in your mother tongue. But then again you couldn't really show that here, cause not many members speak German, so it's a tough situation.
just keep on practising, it'll come

 

[non_stop]

thx Friðbjörn,
i WILL go on practising
sry, but i dont like german rap... even if i'm german...
i cant explain... its juz like that
n caused by my opinion i dont like to rap in german...
n i love english, so i'm "rapping" in english



greetz, non_stop

 

[ImTheOneThatFalls]

AHAHAHAHA...if your really from germany why you rapping about knowing about nyc.

 

[non_stop]

i juz use these lines to rhyme, boy...
why should i not? its not a crime to write over a city?!
n my friend was in nyc for 2 month.
so i think hes knowin a lil bit about this city...
fact is that he told me what nyc was like...
so i rapped one or two lines bout it... wheres the problem?!

greetz, ns

 

[azemkamikaze03]

steroetypical newyourk city..heh. rap about where you are from.

where your at fualt is the lack of word variation throughout your rhymes/
its the same "i coulda guess it" ending produced in every line/
you seem to layout the stereotypical rhymes overdone by fifty cent/
try rapping about peanut butter and jelly or where marvin gaye went/
break out of the box that constrains you into this pool of stereotypical ****/
theres more fresher ideas awaiting you just dig deeper into the pit/
gangster rhymes are fun and all but thats if you master it well/
but dont spit medokre "jails racsist" BS becuase I dont need that hell/
Not putting out a diss, im just leaving a recomendation/
and like fribs said you get more recognition when u rhyme the native tounge of your nation

 

[ImTheOneThatFalls]

i juz use these lines to rhyme, boy...
why should i not? its not a crime to write over a city?!
n my friend was in nyc for 2 month.
so i think hes knowin a lil bit about this city...
fact is that he told me what nyc was like...
so i rapped one or two lines bout it... wheres the problem?!

greetz, ns

What the hell. Ghetto posers. How about I throw you in Harlem or the Bronx nigga? You'd get your German ass jumped. But no hard feelings. I love Germans.

 

[non_stop]

wow... hard stuff...
i think its a kind of diss against me.
sry, but thats what you written when i put ya hints on the side.
thx for ya hint. ill remember em.


so, lets talk bout rappin english:


I wrote the lyrics to hear if its good or not. that i have to practice a lot...mmmmh, i knew bout that before i wrote it.
I didn want to hear if ya like it or not that i don rap in my mothertounge.
if ya like it or not is non of my business! im rappin in english cause, i said it last time, I HATE GERMAN RAP!!! these germanrappers are all juz gangsters, who are showin their dicks n say: "yo... my one is bigger you *******!" i hate em. theyre stupid n theyre showin it everytime. except one but that doesnt matter....

i WILL rap in english no matter what anyone's sayin! cause i love this ****in language n i hate german rap! its non of the stuff we can discuss over! THATS IT! I wont say anymore bout these expressions.


I hope that everyone understood me this time.



Greetz, ns

 

[ImTheOneThatFalls]

Its constructive criticism. No ones stomping on your dreams. Go for it nukka.

 

[non_stop]

i think ya all like to diss me...?! dont ya?!
boy, these are juz a few lines i played with!
what are ya talkin bout?!
NIGGA???!!!!
1: im white.
2: i like black people. theyre nicer than turkeys n stuff.
3: if you're visitin german, no matter when, you have to come to
my city.... Ill show ya our lil NYC-ghetto! so dont talk bout ghetto
if NYC have the only one!!! if ya think like that you know nothin bout
the world!

on sylvester a teenager got killed by a headshot here in our
lil ghetto! n last year someone came n held a gun right away to my
head when i walked with my friend through this shitty piece of landscape!



SO DONT ACT LIKE I DUNNO BOUT THE DANGER ON THIS ****IN WORLD,
OR THE DANGER IN THAT GHETTOS!!!!!!! DID SOMEONE EVER HOLD A
****IN GUN RIGHT AWAY TO YA HEAD?! IF SOMEONE EVER WILL DO THIS,
YOULL SEE THE WORLD IN ANOTHER WAY, I SWEAR!!!!



N you know what.... since this nigga did this to me, im not more a normal
teenager. i had to go to the psychologist for 1 ****in year. i shaked on my
whole body when i saw someone who looked like him! i shaked on my whole
body even if i was still 2 kilometres away from my lil hell!
So dont act like you know all!!!




VERY, VERY, VERY nice greetz, ns

 

[non_stop]

i think ya cant understand my feelings i wrote down, do you?!
do ya understand how someone's feelin with a gun right away to his head?!
... ya cant think anymore, ya juz have ya instincts left, ya get juz a very few breath n ya cant move...
n thats the true life... the clear life...

did ya understand? it doesnt matter if ya get ****ed up in the ghetto of NYC or in our lil ghetto... when somebody kills ya ya are dead. no matter where it happens ya are dead! n these dangerous gangsters n killers are all over the ****in world, not juz in the ghetto of NYC.


greetz, ns




€dit:

ya didnt realize even now?!
thats pretty bad... i dunno why you dont understand me...
i don have my head in ass... n im surely not arguing with ya...
i tried to explain ya that it doesnt matter if im talkin bout the ghetto of
NYC cause all ghettos are the same.
dont you understand that?!

n, k, ya didn get the same amount of respect i got from you. sorry for that.
the bad words Ill take back n Ill edit em.

but don you understand why i got mad?!
ill explain it again:


i got mad,
cause ya handled me like a lil child!
n that wasnt all... ya handled me like a lil child who don understand even
a lil bit of the life...! n i think the experience i made stands for my knowledge
bout the life in some way, you know?
this situation opened my mind, my eyes. from there on i knew what real life
is n that ya have to enjoy every day.
n that not these assassins are the dangerous ones for a normal citizen,
but these damn idiot who are thinkin that theyre god, who are thinkin through their guns. these lil fishs are dangerous for us... cause they don act for money or stuff but for their madness.





so, wanna have peace?



greetz

 

[ImTheOneThatFalls]

Excuse me? As far as I'm concerned I should be recieving the same amound of respect as I've shown you. Nigga doesn't really have to mean I'm calling you black. Its 'slang'. You're getting you're panties up in a bunch for no reason. Yea, I'm sorry about the kid that got shot. Bad **** like that happens everyday. But it doesn't look like you're making it any better with your little ignorant attitude. This is not what I need to be agueing with someone half way around the world. Pfft. Get your head out of your ass.

The ****ing End.

P.S. Use the edit button hunny.