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[Marizka]

Raptured happiness
Made you confess
You live for this
And only this

It’s all you want
All you need
Without it you are
What you can’t be

Almost forgotten
But still alive
Great is the longing
But always in time

It holds confusion
Still you let it in
It’s grip is strong
no use in fighting

will it ever leave
or once go away
so you can be
what they say

monsters screaming
calling your name
it is finally leaving
unveils your true face

nowhere to hide
in this state you remain
all this time you disguised;
you are insane.

 

[brokenangel]

i like this!! the way you rhyme is real original and i love the very last part

nowhere to hide
in this state you remain
all this time you disguised;
you are insane.

jah...good job (you're dutch, right?) goed gedaan (hehe...would be so funny if you weren't)

 

[Marizka]

haha yeah, I am, would quite weird, ur right, but thanx for ur comment

 

[uwantme2b]

This is a really nice poem. I love the imagery you used.
Good work Marizka :thumbsup:

 

[immortal89]

Hey Marizka (do you have nic name that i oculd refer you by?)
Nice poem, good one but elongate your lines a little

 

[Marizka]

thanx! by elongate you mean making the lines longer? yeah I make poems with long and short lines, but it might sound better, ow and my real name is Mariska but you can call me mariz or Maris, that's what I'm usually called.

 

[keza]

wow mari, as usual amazingly written! *claps and waits for the encore*
awesomely awesome!

 

[Marizka]

thanx girl!

 

[keza]

many any times...hehe
i repped you even though you didnt give me an encore...^^

 

[Marizka]

ow haha *gives encore* lol I didn't realize what it meaned! ow and *gives u rep big time*

 

[Friðbjörn]

That's a great poem

 

[_de(\)emy_]

wow that was relly good :thumbsup: i really liked the ending. good work. *claps*