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Ravynlee

Ravynlee

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Someone feeling a tad aggressive lately huh? ;) Well I have to say, whether deliberate or not, I get a sense you're venting - something happen little brother, to break your happy vibe? (Want big sis to kick their ***? ;) ) But seriously, whether it's creative license or regurgitating some inner demons, it does pack a punch, but for my pic I like the last one, I want. Short sharp stanzas that rhyme read aloud like punches, good for aggressive writing, but the change of tempo (I assume it's lyrics, this last one reads like lyrics) it felt more... heartfelt, less defensive, if you get my drift.

Here;

Take the weight of the world off your shoulders,So you relax,

You just let me take care of these boulders,

Soon I'll Be Gone...
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Now that was a pure gem. Worthy of mention. I got a lot more out of that than I did putting the rest of the above together. Nicely done.
 
Peterdea

Peterdea

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Someone feeling a tad aggressive lately huh? ;) Well I have to say, whether deliberate or not, I get a sense you're venting - something happen little brother, to break your happy vibe? (Want big sis to kick their ***? ;) ) But seriously, whether it's creative license or regurgitating some inner demons, it does pack a punch, but for my pic I like the last one, I want. Short sharp stanzas that rhyme read aloud like punches, good for aggressive writing, but the change of tempo (I assume it's lyrics, this last one reads like lyrics) it felt more... heartfelt, less defensive, if you get my drift.Here;

Now that was a pure gem. Worthy of mention. I got a lot more out of that than I did putting the rest of the above together. Nicely done.
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Yeah ***** hit the fan recently between me and a friend... as for you beating someone up... hmm... hahaha!!! nah i can fight on my own ;)

I also like the third one. I wrote it with less rage in my head. but after venting all that I'm happy :)

 
Peterdea

Peterdea

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another song... maybe I should make a thread in the writers? meh...

This one is called "Are Things Better Up There (Dedicated To)" and I wrote it about my friend who lost his mum recently. Like, last weekend recently not a few weeks ago or anything like that.

Well, I can't say I care to much what anyone thinks other then him himself, as it is for him... But here it is anyway...

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It hurts me,

too see,

this right in front of me,

Where are you?

I can't find you...

I need you here,

Just reappear,

Please hear this,

I need this,

Reappear, reappear, reappear

Reappear, reappear, reappear

Unexpected,

And so unwelcome,

Unneeded,

I'm so defeated,

Where are you?

Are things better up there,

Compared to down here.

So many years down here with me,

Now you're gone and I'm in disbelief,

How could this happen?

How could this be?

This isn't the last you'll hear from me...

 
Peterdea

Peterdea

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this ine is obviously different from anything else I've ever written... Think I should post all my songs in a thread?
 
Peterdea

Peterdea

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done it... doesnt feel right to put them on display like that, I personally don't think they deserve a thread, other then maybe the last one which no matter what anyone says about it, I am proud of.
 
Peterdea

Peterdea

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I caught up with Caine today, my once friend Lincoln's brother. It's cool to chill with Caine, I barely get to see him and he's one of the coolest people I've ever met. He is pretty much in a prank war that isn't going to end with Ash... Very funny.

I lost 2 games of Star Wars Battlefront II and I was forced to drink a can of beer (I hate beer... makes me feel sick), but I only had a small amount of time to do it, or else I'd have to drink another one... So bad...

Ash and me drank scotch. He can't take it very easily but it's no big deal for me. Caine filmed us drinking it thinking it'd be hilarious, but I did tell him it's nothing exciting.

I live such an amazing life huh? lol.

 
Peterdea

Peterdea

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do you got ***** beer down under? xD lol
hehe is that vid available for public? xP
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beer... i hate the ****... tastes horrible. ***** beer is just boring lol. lite.... zzzZZZzzz

the video is on Caine's phone. I'll ask if he's got it next time I see him if it's important that you see it.

 
MrsBennington-Delson

MrsBennington-Delson

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beer... i hate the ****... tastes horrible. ***** beer is just boring lol. lite.... zzzZZZzzz
the video is on Caine's phone. I'll ask if he's got it next time I see him if it's important that you see it.
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lite ?? well u're right but theres also a uhm well not lite but still ***** beer kinda thing xD at least we got taht over here ^^ its tequila flavoured beer it has 5,9%

yes me wants ^_^

 
Peterdea

Peterdea

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Going to the rugby today. Not really the coolest thing for me but still, it'll be pretty good.

Got a lot of Smashing Pumpkins music, I lost all mine in a virus... lol

 
Peterdea

Peterdea

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The rugby suprised the **** out of me! I love it, all i want to do is go see another match. everyone should go watcha game. amazing atmosphere!!!!
 
Peterdea

Peterdea

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I'm not tired at all for once, pity that I have nothing to do this weekend. I'll probably be at home all weekend. I just hope that someone calls me or something... As long as it gets me the **** out of here I'm happy.

In other news, Scavenger Hunt is drawing closer... Excited as **** for this but I'm not 100% whats going on, it's really going insane at the moment so I'll use the next week to get things together so that all will be good. This could be a difficult task but worth it in the end.

 
Peterdea

Peterdea

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I hung out with the Goth population today instead of going to school. I will say I don't like the way they act occasionally and the fact that they seem to "like pain"... But a few of the people I met today are freaking awesome. CBF explaining... Meh... Too worn out...
 
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