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FireHawk

FireHawk

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This was written in the middle of my last drug addiction in April. It never made its way into a full song with music so I just left it as a poem. I love the first two verse the second two are kinda weak though.

"Uncaring"

Sometimes I wonder

Why I even care

It doesn't even matter

So why do I pretend to care

Everything's a shadow

Of what it once was

Time keeps on passing

Happiness slowly fading

But I still don't care

I feel like I'm Coming

Completely Undone

But I still don't care

My own little roller coaster

That I can't get off

Life's like a carousel

Around and around

Just like a bad dream

But is reality

But **** it I don't care

I look out the window

Theres children playing on the road

I know its dangerous

I know I should say something

But I don't really care

Someone could get hurt

Someone could die

But that is there fate

And right now I just don't care

The best years of my life

Slowly passing by

Everyone is so happy

And I'm all alone

I'm writing this song

Just to pass the time along

I can't think of a chorus

Which would be the hard of this song

So I just wrote another verse

Just bring closure

But really

I don't even care

I don't care

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FireHawk

FireHawk

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[June 21, 2008]

I have been told we are getting the 4th of July (Independence Day in the U.S.) and 5th off (the Saturday after). I am glad 6 days of work a week is killing me. Which is odd cause laster year I was doing 60 hour weeks no 48 hour weeks. My and like 10 friends are all going to Cedar Pointe it will be great.

Jess and her boyfriend argued last night. So I listened to her cry till. 4AM...it bothers me he is such an *** to her. Its so hypocritical he can go hangout with a car full of girls, but she can't hang out with me.

 
FireHawk

FireHawk

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come to australia and we might work out...
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You never know :) Actually in three years I might be in Australia for my last year of schooling (since we have a different school times it would equal my 4th year...

[June 22, 2008]

[Part 1]

A girl from California has agreed to play/record piano and sing on a song I wrote. She will rewrite piano and then record vocals. I will then lay down an instrumental. There are two possible songs she might sing that I have written. I am demoing the vocals tomorrow to send with lyrics to her. She has an amazing voice and I can't wait to work with her.

 
FireHawk

FireHawk

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yeah I don't know that status of the band anymore so I decided I am gonna go back to solo work and completely rewrite. Its really sad I loved that band. They just won't practice, and kinda upset I am leaving and they have to have a sub while I am gone.
 
FireHawk

FireHawk

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just don't rush it!!!

And thanks I am trying but my story is getting hard for me cause my general outline has a few holes in story (hence: the slow updating). I have an idea for a story that will probally be a lot better that centers on a band called "Euphoria". I have a base of that. Music is easier for me to write about so I think it will be good :D Just gotta get threw the rest of [Living In ****].

 
woodyloveslinkin

woodyloveslinkin

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I won't!! I haven't touched the file today I've been thinking about how Romeo one of Sarah's cats wonders into Ravyn's apartment and she takes it. And Mel gets done for saying the word Jesus.

If you like my story there's a movie called Blade Runner it's an '82 film with Harrison Ford in it and it's kinda like my story but my story doesn't contain replicas who are aliens who have entered earth's space illegally. Again, there are so many differences I wouldn't like to SpAm in your journal lol.

What I think you need improving on, take this as advice or ignore it, I don't really care, but the formatting of your story needs to be taken care of. Like not double-paragraphing your paragraphs (an example I've given you in this post with me double paragraphing my response).

 
woodyloveslinkin

woodyloveslinkin

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Don't leave a chunk of space out (it's just something that gets to me about people's work). Go on next paragraph.

Wholah! No

double space.

(I didn't mean to harsh by the way)

 
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