Foxx's Poetry Corner

[Stenners]

Done well though a couple gripes when u say the world will never be the same U dont have that much to base it on....... in my eyes it hasnt changed that much since I was a kid other than its alot faster

 

[Jeezy]

teehehehe, yea, i was listening to It and decieded it was a good line, so i used it ^_^

yeah that's cool...and it's a nice song also

 

[Greyfoxx]

Done well though a couple gripes when u say the world will never be the same U dont have that much to base it on....... in my eyes it hasnt changed that much since I was a kid other than its alot faster

I do have much to base it on, see I, unlike you, have read LOADS of books. and the world has changed drasticlly. the people have changed, everything has changed. If you try to do something good in this world, most of the people shun you out, or push you aside. But, on the otherhand, if you do something bad or ill-mannered or something, you get on the night-time news.

tell me, is that how you want the world to be?

and Jeezy- Yeahh, thats a great song, it has tons of meaning. thats why i "borrowed" its 'land of Confusion"

 

[Stenners]

^^

Thats from the point of view of others though, no one can see true change other than yourself.

 

[By_My-elf]

Whoa you really otudone yourself I like this.

You never really see ppl talk bout these things.

I really dont have much to say I'm not really that well with comments -.-;

 

[diana]

I think this is...brilliant...

I love the theme...something new from you...you put it so good together...

I love that it's so realistic but yet...kinda dreamy...Idk...it is hiding some hope...and wishes...

It's good...and it's bad...it's pessimistic...

Wah, really awesome piece of art!

 

[Greyfoxx]

As I watch the moon

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Its phases pass

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I wonder when

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I’ll meet my match.

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I know he’ll come

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Yet how long I wait

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Is unknown to me.

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But, I’ll wait

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From tomorrow

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To the end of time

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I’ll wait for him to find me

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Under the moon

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Under the sky

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I’ll be waiting for him to come

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And find me.

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Seasons may pass

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And years may grow

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But my hope will never fade

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He will come for me

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This man who’s my match

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He is the Yin of my Yang

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And yet, I know not who he is

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May he be smart?

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May he be cunning?

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Charming?

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All these thing, I still don’t know

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I don’t know what he’ll look like

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Or how he’ll talk

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But this thing is for certain

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I’m waiting for him

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And only him.

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Till the end of time

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If I must

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I will wait…

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[Jeezy]

That's a nice poem...and it's a good thing to wait for the perfect match

 

[ForgottenKid]

Great poem Grey; its an understandable topic and very easy to relate to.

 

[Greyfoxx]

thanks ya'll...... ^_^ it was one of my spur-of-the-moment poems

 

[Greyfoxx]

Torn…

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Chorus

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Why? Do I feel this way

Tell me why!? Do I feel this?

Why!? Do you make me feel loved

Yet I’m powerless to love you back.

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You make me smile

Yet I’m torn

Between what’s right

And what’s true to me

Tear my heart from my chest

Just to see if I have one

Please, don’t be this way

Leave me here

While I have some feelings left.

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Chorus

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You smile at me

Say that it’s meant to be

Yet another has my hand

And they say you’re wrong for me

Yet you make me laugh

*** this is tough

My mind is torn

My heart is stabbed

Between the two who are here

Between my mind and my heart

I am shattered.

Will I die if I don’t?

Will I cease to exist?

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Chorus

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Heavy Verse

Why?

Must I feel?

Why?

Must these things happen

Why!?

Can’t I Think straight?!

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Chorus

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Alt Chorus

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Why? Do you smile?

And Why? Can’t I decide?

Why, must I feel this way?

Why must you light this fire.

Why? Can’t I burn it out?

I must feel… I must choose

I choose…

I choose…

Choose….

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[Jeezy]

That's really nice...good to see you on here again

 

[Greyfoxx]

That's really nice...good to see you on here again

thanks Jeezy. Tis good to be back. These lyrics are important to me, so i'm glad ya like em!!!! *hug*

 

[Ravynlee]

Torn.

Well I guess I could state the obvious that it's great as always but really you're prolly sick of me saying that. I know you want a rant and I wish I had one to give. In all honesty when I read this something in me shut down. Its not on a bad way. Realistically it struck a chord in me I guess. No, I know. I felt things I thought I'd forgotten and put them back away again before they got too raw. Wanting what you can't have, questioning what you do/don't. Even if you dont take every sentence literally there's something in this that everyone could relate to in some way not necessarily relationship-wise like. I dunno, I just... yeah... I read it, I liked it, but I cant rant about it like you want. Besides, I believe our lengthy AIM chat earlier dried what little rant in me there was left. Noice. At least I replied

 

[Sygy]

i really liked it. my only critism was that the language was muchplainer then what you normally write. i cant explain myself well. but, still good.

 

[diana]

Nice and powerful lyrics...I like it...awesome work!

I also have to say that I like your previous poem/lyrics, whatever it is...

 

[Stenners]

A bit more blunt then ur older stuff but still nice

good job

 

[DarknessLover]

I really liked it, I loved the dark feeling to it. I could really hear this song like in real life. Great work Grey!

 

[Greyfoxx]

I really liked it, I loved the dark feeling to it. I could really hear this song like in real life. Great work Grey!

Thanks alot. these lyrics are like my life right now, so i'm glad ya like em

 

[DarknessLover]

Yeah, because you pour your soul into your lyrics, it just makes it that much more powerful. That's just my thought anyway.